firstly I question how Naruto, who- in your story- has been stated to be one of the best ANBU (or good enough to be labelled with 'Taicho'), got caught up in his surroundings so much that Ku Fei knocked him down.

second; this entire chapter felt rushed and barbarically cliché- child prodigy gets put in same class as child prodigy, who- while owning a lot of Icha Icha, as stated in this chapter-gets embarrassed a lot like a standard anime protagonist, and while being a clearly powerful ninja- again, as stated in this chapter- his character is all over the place with seemingly no rhyme or reason. I get he's a ninja who specialised in tricking genin, but he's an ANBU in a different place, with no connection to anyone. so I fail to see the reason in having him keep his- literally- retarded personality. sure it's a little toned down and calmer, but it is essentially Naruto's attitude from Shippudden to a 'T'.

then there's the violent tendency you've given him; sure, Kyuubi could be influencing him- but if so, why not say so? or at least allude to it? again, these tendencies are aimed at civilians, people ninja protect, so why would he even think such a thing about a harmless civilian?

oh, and don't even get me started on the scene in Konoe's office; how did he get snuck up on when, again, he's a fucking ANBU? and how can Konoe detect chakra and the Kyuubi- apparently- when chakra is different from magic? unless you plan on pulling some 'oh they're the same energies but used in different ways by different people' (which, by the way, is a weak and cliché way of saying that you're too lazy to come up with an actual reason), then please re-think this.

the first chapter of any story is the most important- it gets the reader engaged and makes them want to read more. this chapter felt too rushed and broken with plot holes and back-and-forth character design to make me feel any sort of engagement.

i'm sorry, i'm sure the rest of your story is, at least moderately, improved. but if i'm not engaged by the first chapter then i'm not going to be engaged by the rest of the story.

best of luck to you.

Update soon?! It's been 6 YEARS!

I can't believe Naruto just let that whole "Kyuubi-sensei" thing pass.
I mean HOW DARE HE NOT SAY ANYTHING; for one if it was just about helping an innocent child then why didn't he help Naruto all those years, especially considering that it was because of HIM that Naruto got treated like that in the first place. Second Kyuubi not giving Naruto the information on Evangeline could have put him at a serious disadvantage. & third despite Kyuubi apparently knowing magic rather well, he hardly told Naruto anything about it, which, not only would it of made Naruto much more powerful, it also put the mission & NARUTO AT RISK for not knowing about magic in a location where all your enemies know & use magic.

Well-written story and nice progression. Decent amount of drama for following the genre and good story flow. You did very well when you wrote this so far, and I look forward to future chapters.

Update

wow...

good story one fella

update soooooooooooon!

Fear me for I am 'he who reviews one year after the last update'!

It's always nice to read a story that goes against the norm. I mean, if you look through the list nowadays its all pretty much the same. But then you see one like this, and your entire existence on this site is instantly validated. That's exactly how I felt when I saw this story.

Thank you for validating the existence of fanfiction as we know it, your efforts are much appreciated.

As for the story itself... It's very good. You've got a nice moral dilemma for Naruto, you've got contrasting motivations, you've got romance (and with kuu-fei! You have no idea how long I've been looking for that!), you've got intrigue, you've got a tiny little bit of angst, you've got originality, and you've got a badass Naruto.

I think that's just about everything it takes to create one of the greatest plots that has ever existed.

So if you're not going to continue this story, thanks for everything so far. If you are going to continue the story however, I can't wait to see what happens next.

Spectacular work, update ASALA.

-Gerti

P.S. As Soon As Life Allows

this is a great fic so far. I like the pairing :)

I ope this will be continued.

Will you ever update

this story sucks i waited the whole story for naruto to kill Konoka and all he ever did was get more attached what type of crappy ninja did you make him anyways An anbu who can't kill his emotion, and he lacking the only redeeming quality canon naruto had loyalty to his village and determination.

I don't know when youll update again, so have a lissen to this prediction on how the festival battle will go. Negi and almost all the girls will follow cannon procedure, while naruto disappears or switches himself out with a shadow clone. Then, naruto dresses up in his anbu gear. He'll leak kyuubi chakra and smash his way towards his target, he is about to behead her when he's assaulted by his memories of class 3-A. Unable to do it, he drops the sword and proclames 'I can't do it!' seeing an opening negi or detains rushed forward and stabs naruto through the guy, and more importantly, the seal. This removes the kyuubi healing ability. Naruto coughes up blood behind the mask and when the mask is lifted off his dieing body, he explains his part in this situation. Naruto could fade with his chakra and dissapear for a while (mabe go to an alternate dimension where he can age to 15) and can return. As for what te HOKAGE would say, just say chao had te money for an S rank and sent it to the hokae. Oh, and eres an idea, naruto's dimension runs on a different time strewn then the one ate academy. Thus, 3 years could be a few weeks in the academy.

dude that was awesome make more soon but make naruto go kyuubi some in the next chapter

Definitely looking foward to seeing what happens will Naruto forsake his mission or still go through with it D:, keep the good work coming !

Good chapter, and Story. i'm Waiting your next chapter eagerly.