Bye bye.

this is your best story to date

dont make a sequel to this

This story is so damned good. I can't believe how you can write so well. And make your stories so touching.

The ending was so great, and I almost cried. And yep, like some people have stated, continue Revolt. I've kinda been rereading it, lol. Got scolded quite often because its PSLE year for me O-o.

Wow, that was really good. It reminded me a lot of A Walk to Remember. Great job. Keep up the good work man.

You are GOD. I can't believe that there are tears on my face. I don't get how you can write as well as the best writers in the world.

One question, though. What's "terminal arrhythmia"?

I love how the setting is in a school or something. It makes the story natural or something. Keep writing stories, you're amazing.

Oh God, I'm crying.

I see absolutely no sap at all. Perhaps it a problem with the gradient of water potential. I think Aster would have considered this comment utterly lame.

I can still see you writing in your typical style, with lots and lots of communications between the main characters. This is duly understandable, though I'd say a little redundant at times. Of course, we love it all the same.

There are some parts, however, that are made confusing due to paragraphing issues or your expression of words. I know, because I have a problem with expression as well.

You've got me thinking that I stand absolutely zero a chance of actually winning something at least. Bugger.

Really touching. u can really write very well. U r one of my all time fav author already.

keep writing

Big, long, and very nice as usual. Nice timing after the big war, and keep going on the Revolt or else I'll grab my poking stick .

Your writing is awe-inspiring. Nothing less.

I have no idea what you're talking about. THIS IS VERY MUCH LIKE MAPLE! Except for the school setting (but I guess that's a bit like grinding), you wrote in the spirit of MapleStory so nicely. (That's what I like to aim for.)

This was a pretty cool way to add a phoenix into the story. It's like partly in the mind. I love how the phoenix wasn't folded recognizably.

I thought some of the dialogue was a bit awkward compared to the rest of the realistic setting. You support the lines well though, so it's not like it was a problem.

I'm thinking you're drawing from a lot of personal experience. All the more realistic and heartfelt I guess.

This one was very light-hearted. Not at all depressing. But it was substantial. Yummy.

Hm. Well, as usual, your writing is nothing short of the greatest writers in the world. I really wonder how you do it sometimes. And the fact that you wrote something this good for my challenge...

Technically, I can't praise it enough. The story development was amazingly done - you can tell perfectly what each character is like. The ending was beautiful. I don't know what else to say about it.

Though the humour you included was a little out of place at times, it made it all the better. I'm not sure how to put it - a contrast between the more lighthearted beginning and the sad ending?

I can't say anything bad about it, really. But I think you could have done more about what Zak really thinks of Shidara. Sometimes, she seems evil, but other times, she seems nice. That could have been worked on more, but...I guess that wasn't as important as the main story.

"'I'm sorry.' she whispers, her voice slightly broken, and this time he can tell she is telling the truth." I wonder if she's the bully you first made her out to be, or if she's the caring person she appears to be later. Did she change or something like that?

I noticed that the story is in present tense. It feels different from other stories because of that, and I've hardly seen stories in present tense before. It works well for a touching story like this one.

Well done, anyway, and though this story was long, I'm glad I took the twenty minutes off my time to read it (I read in great detail, so I usually take a long time, you see).

As for the challenge, I'm going to have a hard time choosing - everyone submits such amazing pieces. But I do believe your story deserves to win.

Kal Ancalas, you write so amazingly that it makes me want to throw myself out the nearest window.

It's probably something you hear a lot, but you really are the best author out there that I've seen. I could really feel the emotions from Zak and Aster, in the end especially. The humor (unintentional or not, I have no idea) in the beginning made me laugh a lot, which is weird for a sap story, but that's not the point.

I could rant on and on forever about how I loved this, and I probably would by explaining how I liked every single scene, but there's a thing called Time that won't let me do that, so I will just say that this touched me. And that I will make more of an effort to review later stories.

And I thought I could have stood a chance of making it through the Challenge. Dead wrong.

But it was all worth it. It's actually these kind of stories that make my life less stressful, if you can believe me. Weird?

And yeah, this actually reminds me of how I can't write sap. XD

To end off; touching story. Couldn't have been better, by my standards.

Lol I just uploaded a very similar story. Friendship stories ftw. It was pretty good, although the review count was appalling. :\

This was longer and better though. But I'm glad I read it all, 'cause it was good! I liked the introduction of Aster, lol. Eh, stories about interesting new kids. Luv 'em. Poor Aster. A 15-year old n00b, I mean, beginner. Feel so sorry for her.

-screams-

Oh gosh, I haven't felt this way while reading a fanfic in a longlonglong time. I'm currently more in an angsty-don't-disturb-me mood, so yeah, that's probably why.

Rawr, now the rest of us seriously stand no chance of winning her contest. D: