loved the story! you did so very well with it

Also, I must say again how much I love this story. I love it to bits. I have it on my notes in my iPod Touch, so I can read it whenever I want. :D :D :D You're awesome.

For all the idiots that have been reviewing this and complaining about the Mary Sues, I find that hilarious. She *admitted* the fact that Gracie and Niki were Sues. This is merely an indulgent pleasure meant to take care of one of the worst characters in the history of fiction (and a bigger (canon!)Sue than either one of these original characters).

i almost feel bad about bella... almost

awesome! it never gets boring :)

awesome!

omg i love it.. it's really good you write really well and the plot seems awesome. btw i hate bella too ;) haha

I suppose this is sort of an indulgent read, because although Niki is such a blatant Sue that in any other context I would verbally rip her to pieces, the storyline actually isn't too bad and there's a good sense of humor. The Bella-bashing (although totally extreme and completely out of whack) was appreciated too. ;)

So, so far I really like it :)

Its always so hard to find a good Jacob/OC story and I'm really hoping that yours doesn't dissapoint!

Although I'm not gonna lie, I'm still trying to grasp my head around the whole Edward/OC thing. As much as I hate him its just strange to imagine him with someone else lol! But I'll eventually get used to it.

Very good story!

I liked Nikki and Gracie and I hate Bella ;)

I absolutely WUVVLED this! And I'm officially (and then some) adopting Niki as my sister from another mister. Gawd, that girl is a PSYCHO BIATCH (in a good way) Also, Bella-bashing is HIGHLY supported in my little universe. Like homosexuals (no offense, but they are HILARIOUS)

With Bella-bashing-support and laughy praise,

-Peachuz .

that was really good

You know why this story sucks?

Because the female protagonist is an outrageous Mary Sue, everyone is out of character and the plot is inconsistent and makes no sense whatsoever.

If you're going to have yourself a bit of "Bella-bashing" (which I find is a rather strange solitary motive for writing a fanfiction story, but so be it), go ahead, by all means. I have nothing against that, because obviously, everyone prefers different characters. But PLEASE, make the story-line at least a bit logical... like, when exactly did Bella cheat on Edward and how? With JACOB? There's no reference to such doings at all! Like, what the hell? Seriously. The scene in the meadow with Bella and Jacob... is that supposed to be proof of some sort? Eh, no. Inconclusive much? And the way the Cullens reacted... just, ugh. I literally cringed while reading that, plus the bit where Alice has the vision and everyone totally has to tell Gracie, because, of course, you know, DUH, she and Edward are SO meant to be together, oh, my God. (Sarcasm ends here). The third chapter was a complete mess in the character department and that's the last I had the nerves to read.

Gah, this story had SO much potential, but was all the more disappointing due to its nonexistent logic. Ah, well. Hope your other endeavours turn out better than this... thing. Good luck.

Gasp! Dane is home..oh..i hope she wont die :(

awesome story by the wayy! :D

I read the whole thing your a fantistic writer