I like it, it's not too much of a cliche and it has a nice atmosphere! Please update :)

Wow, what a piece, especially for your first language not being Enlglish! You write better than most naives I know, for sure. :3

Just a few minor corrections (you should know, it's a sign of love! I click out of bad fics, and leave short reviews for good ones. Only amazing fics get corrections!):

- 'freezer' should be 'icebox' because of the time period

- 'fundamentally altruist' should be 'fundamentally altrusitic'

- 'if not only curiosity' should be just 'only curiosity'

- 'As usual she didn't' should be 'As usual, she didn't'

- 'Roy Mustang new his stuff' should be 'knew'

The random Japanese suffix used by Vanessa seems random and out of place as well.

But overall, I loved it! Eagerly waiting for more over here!

Your doing a great job. Can't wait to read more.

I usually avoid romance stories, but I was intrigued by your summary, and I'm really glad that I did decide to read your story. The only problem I see in your writing is that it did not continue past chapter 2. I don't know what you have planned for chapter 3 and beyond, but I'd really like to see some suspense of them being followed and such. Not that I'm saying you should do that, you should do whatever you want.

very good story but what sucks is you havent updated yet...

I think you are doing beautifully on this fiction. You have wonderful writing that's a pleasure to read.

finish stori

Well, I like it so far. Definitely keep up the good work, because I've got you on story alert! Oh, and wasn't Madame Christmas Grunnman in disguise? I'm sure it was...

Loving it, very in character I love how you capture them, can't wait for the next chapter

Thanks for you comments so far! Well, this story is rated M after all, so I guess that's sort of material that it's ultimately heading for. You know, like bad language. Anyway. More coming up soon, thanks for your patience!

Is there more of this coming soon? I hope so because it's a wonderful start. I can't wait to see where you go with this, it's an interesting concept, so I really hope you update soon!

Well well! Two various states of inebriation, plus an apartment? Always a recipe for success. Eager to see more of this story.

This is a good story

I was getting so in to this,I was so disappointed when i got to the end i wanted to read more so update as soon as you can! LaTeRzZ