Can you write the rest of the story please I'm really curios as to what happens

Absolutely fantastic story! You’ve got every character exactly right. Even your own made up ones are completely believable! I seriously think this could have been Shrek 2 instead of the one Dreamworks gave us. You need to finish this even if it is something like 4 years later, I was completely horrified when I saw you hadn’t finished the story. Bring it back to the front page! Waitaminute, you haven’t finished it in a different story have you? Because if you have I’ve just made myself seem like a huge idiot. Oh well, no change. Oh and I’ve seen your drawings of the characters, they’re really good. Wish I could draw like that. Anyways, great Shrek story, loved reading it! Yeah, i've read it about 3 times already, yep its THAT good!

*much dancing and happy carryings-on* Huzzah for the return of the Lunchpail! And I must say that I adore the arguments. And the goblins. Goblins rock, especially when commanded by Jareth the Goblin King. I shall save my fangirlish squeals for after this review is over, never fear. So cannot wait to hear Cerul's story, though.

Another problem solved (or delayed), and more "little problems" appear. Good narration; they're in a bit of an other-worldly situation right now, and you do a good job of helping us visualize it. And good description of the sudden and unexpected battle; it's fun to "see" Shrek and Fiona in action together.

As usual, excellent dialog exchanges. And good use of humor. Donkey's taking off on the concept of "be" was particularly entertaining. And I liked lines like "'Goblin' Shrek whispered to Fiona, as if knowing what to call the thing made it somehow less of a threat."

I also like Shrek and Fiona's little "lost" tiff, with Cerul's "stereo scolding" when he dared to intervene.

Overall, another fine chapter, with an intriguing close by Cerul. Looking forward to the next!

That was a fun scene. Good for Shrek giving the hunters a taste of their own medicine!

Very intriguing! I'm curious who this new would-be ruler is, and what the story is with the fairies. Your descriptions are very vivid and well-written too.

Hey, look, I do exist! (I've just not had time to review in a LONG while.)

Just had a look at your homepage...First of all I really like that new drawing of Cerul. Especially the beard, it's suave and a little Inigo Montoya-ish. (One of the problems with Shrek 2 is that they didn't parody that "Hello. My name is Inigo Montoya. You killed my father. Prepare to die"

line with Puss in boots. It seems a natural given for anyone with a spanish accent and a sword, but dreamowrks has 2 more sequels to work with and I guess they felt they had to save some funny material HINT HINT NUDGE NUDGE DREAMWORKS PEOPLE!

The best part was the very end, partway thru the credits. Dragon needs a bigger part, tottally, and those little halfbreed critters were CUTE!

As to Cerul's description in the art section, he doesn't seem particularly antisocial to me; in fact I kind of get the impression that he's a little eager for human contant (er...ogre..you

know,contact with beings-of-the-sentient persuasion.) By the way, I have been reading the story and I still like it. Cerul in a dress is funny, but you know, it is getting a little annoying to see Shrek so smug and in the upper hand ALL the time. I personally would have liked to see Shrek have to wear the dress, but that's just me, and no it really, REALLY has nothing to do with any strange fetishes, har har. Anyway, Shrek allready has Donkey to have a Donkeylike relationship with. Shouldn't there be something deeper going on with Cerul then "you're annoying, but usefull?" Was

there some childhood experience (ok, other then magicing away shrek's hair)that caused this? Mainly what I'm saying is that i'd like to see some definate appreciation between the two, because after all they are brothers.

Am I putting WAY to much thought into a

corporate charecter's family background?

By the way, you seem to be getting a little sloppy in the final typings, like this right here: "the most ingredient of all!" ...I think you meant to say "important" in there, right? It's just a good idea to check for things like that.

But anyway, I really liked the huge charecter development bits a few chapters back. Also, nice insertion of Fiona's feminism at the end of the latest chapter. Yay for the UNDISNEY princess!

And just WHEN are you going to update?

Uh, its great and all but when is Fiona gonna turn back into an ogress?

awesome! last chapter, you had me thinking it was Shrek's and Cer's mother who they went to see. next chapter up A.S.A.P.

Hhm, looks like their home free...

signed

Specter

Excellent, i'm still reading the entire thing, but its great sofar. Tell me one thing - how many chapter do you plan?

Ladies and gentlemen, THIS is how you write

a "Shrek" fanfiction. This particular chapter

(17) may not have the action of many of the

others, with the characters "simply" moving from

an elevator down the streets to a particularly

interesting little house, but what is TRULY

moving about this chapter is one of those

tender moments between Shrek and Fiona, cleverly

accompanied by a nostaligic and familiar tune,

that again highlights the special, pure,

elemental love shared by these two that is able

to transcend ANYTHING. As usual, this author is

able to paint (or digitalize) with words scenes

that could easily come from DreamWorks' best

computers, his characterizations are spot-on,

and his dialog both very credible and quite

entertaining. (And when it comes to selection

of a pet for a certain ogre family, you really

have to hand it to him.)

awe! after so long a wait, this is as far as we go? next cahpter, quick! this is SO awesome!

... Is this Shreks... mom?

signed

Specter