I can truly empathise with Steven, especially since he was always referred to - by his own father - as "family that's not Steven", which is also insensitive.

Poor child!

How could Serenity do this?! No matter if it was the truth, her "not real son" is only a child..!

This is way too cruel.. sniff!

Phew! That was intense! Lovvvvvvvvvvved it !

oh my LIFE!

I love the way you put that song 'Everytime We Touch' by Cascada! It's my favourite...I so LOVE your stories...especially this one...although Serenity isn't one of the characters I particularly like

OMG Steven is such a sweety...LOVE IT!

OMG! Luv this :D u dun a good job.

Hopin 4 a sequel

'“Let’s just say… you should get more in touch with your ancient Egyptian self.” Oh no, not this Egyptian crap again.'

That was so great. I was laughing so hard when I read that. I mean, dude, you just totally decimated Seto and all the rest. I thought it was really interesting how you wrote the intro. I was really surprised by it. I actually felt a little bad for Serentiy, I mean, I know you said that you were going to try to justify her a bit, but this blew me away man. I still am mad at her for what she said, but at least she's trying here. So yes, I really was impressed by that, because I was thinking that was going to be impossible. Seriously, man, I don't think I could have justified her at all.

Then you have Dartz and the whole opposition. I really liked that. How Steven realized how wrong this all was and how at the end it was like only he and Seto mattered. It was just so bittersweet. I loved it. And I'm totally going to be getting on your case for the sequal. Like, you see me PMing you and all that every day, lol. Nah, I won't flood your imbox, but you'll get the message easily enough. Anyways, excellent story. It was heart felt, funny, cute, and most of all, a well written story. Great Job! And you say you're not a good writer, ha! You just stay your awesome self and post the sequal soon before I die of anticipation.

Later!

~Rena

OMG! What in the world is Dartz talking about? Please let Steven be alright and I pray that Seto finds out what Dartz meant and that he is able to rescue his son and that they will be able to put what's happened behind them and become a family again... I'll be looking for the sequel. I love this story...

Okay, first thing first: A Review for your story.

That was fantastic! I honestly was not expecting you to end it. And with such an evil cliff hanger too! Ah well. At least there will be yet another wonderful sequel to look forward to! I seriously can not wait to read it! o Your stories are just so uber amazing, just like you! I'm totally gonna give you the biggest hug in art!

Thank you so much for the chapter. I think this was one of the greatest presents I have received in a long time! Thank you for making it so special! You are a truly wonderful person, one of the greatest love child anyone could ever ask for. Thank you for everything. I don't know what I'd do without someone like you to brighten up everyday. You're awesome! o

Love ya always

~Alien D.

PS: I still owe you those cookies, I know and I'm going to make you an awesome stick figure comic. (I was thinking of doing a mini one of the bus scene cause that would just be hilarious, that and I'll attempt to make some fan art for you (Maybe one of Seto, Mokuba, and Steven (though I don't exactly know what Steven looks like...)) And again, thank you for everything! O

Ouch!

I noticed that you did switch the roles from the last chapter of A Gift From God. I have to admit I felt a little sorry for Serenity...wait...no, no I didn't. As much as I can tell she feels really guilty by what she's done, I think it was right for Seto to pretty much say that she can't just abandon a child and then all of a sudden act like you care. But I an sorry it had to turn out the way. But, I think it was good for Seto to tell Serenity the truth, no matter how painful it would be.

I can't wait until the sequel. Great chapter!

Wow! It ended. Well, I'm really sorry to say, I did NOT the this ending. I think Seto is an egotistic jerk. Serenity is human like the rest of us, and she made mistakes. Her mistkaes were horrid, and I don't cut her any slack. What she did was wrong, no quiestions asked, but I think that she should've been able to have a second chance with Steven. She was finally starting to realize that what she did was wrong and seto gets to decide taht its too late. I was hoping that even though it was probably impossible for Serenity and Steven to have a perfect relationship, they could have some sort of friendship and closure. I think to allow Serenity and Steven to have that would've been the right thing to do. But I guess not. I thought that was where this story was going, that it was going to resolve the conflict of the first story with a happier ending, but I guess not. This story makes me want to cry, and not in a good way. I don't think I can read this anymore. This is just too sad.

You...shot Mokuba?

What?

How?

Why?

-cries-

I hate Dartz. I'm sorry this should be a really long, detailed and infomative review full of praise and admiration for you and you brilliant writing technique and skill.

But alas. I've been working fo 6 hours straight (not school work, WORK work. grr) and am sunburt and dying.

So I plan to head to bed when I'm done here.

You do a sequal : I'll be there. As usual. Guarentee.

:D

Also, I'll try to PM you. Maybe I'll do it before I log off tonight, but maybe I'll wait until tomorow.

-_-

So tired.

I have something werid but erhaps interesting to tell you?

lol

You may not even find it interesting.

In fact you probably won't.

Haha.

But coincidential I think.

Anywho.

Um..yeah.

Gods, this is such a crappy review, you deserve better.

I'll leave you with this: Loved it, you're making us all need to read the next one.

I promise I'll be there, because honestly, I wouldn't miss it for the world.

Skilled, creative and expressive. Three words to describe your writing.

Toodle-pip!

-Ame

Wow! I'm surprised, you were able to suspend your updating for a whole day for me so that I could review! I'm so proud of you! Lol, alright, so somehow I'm actually up this early in the morning and I feel like reviewing this super-awesome-amazing story like, right now. But the question is where to begin?

Perhaps the beginning is best. I particularly liked how you opened the story with Steven just waiting to be picked up and noticing the families in the area. It was such a cute and innocent scene. Then when he asks about his mother, I really had to laugh at Seto's and Mokuba's reactions. It was like 'where the heck did this come from?' 'Never mind that, why did it even come?' sort of reactions, which I liked a lot, after reading the last predessor of this story.

Then I loved the trip itself. I liked how you had all these random events and weird people for them to meet up with. The bus especially was funny and I liked how both Seto and Mokuba just had a hard time the whole way while Steven, being the adorable little angel that he is, got along fine with Mike.

Then the whole back plot too that came to light with this 'Seto killed someone' thing. That was great. And I loved how off all people, the one's who helped them were Tristen, (he's a biker, wow, didn't see that one coming), and Yugi. Best line "I hate you less now then I ever have in my whole life." "It's a compliment, don't worry." Man, that had me laughing into hysterics. I mean, really, that was just too funny. And to think, Yugi's a police officer. So fitting, isn't it? cough cough, unlike Tristen, cough cough. -Smiles-

The brotherly fight thing that you had between Seto and Mokuba. Reading your last two stories, Mokuba always had looked up to Seto and it made for a very cute brotherly love type thing. But in this story, I think you wrote their relationship perfectly. I mean, I could totally see that distance as sadly, no one can be a kid forever (save for Peter Pan), and Mokuba, while still a sweet and funny character, is going to grow up a bit and realize that the guy who raised him has faults too.

And I have to say, I feel like I've said this before, but I can't help but hate Serentity's guts at the moment. She's so self absorbed and after the way she treated Steven was like, just wrong. Like, seriously. You have all of these mother quotes at the top of your chapters and she just goes off like the little spoon of poison that she is. How can that Iniro even think of marrying her? How could Seto ever think of marrying her? She's so... so... Ugh. I mean, come on, where the heck is that girl's heart?

How Steven ran off and told them that he hated them just broke my heart. It was as though all of the innocence in him had been viciously ripped out and shattered into a million pieces. Maybe it's just me, but when boys cry, it's like, now what? What can we possibly do? Is there even anything we could do? You know what I mean? It's just so saddening and in a sense, humbling somehow.

But then the ending of this chapter was in a word, awesome. "My name is Dartz." Ha! Priceless evilness, that's what that was. Don't we all love those moments? I can't wait to continue reading your story. It's going to be a lot of fun to see how you wrap this one up.

So now that I've written this super-awesome-amazing review, you can update. I know you just jumped for joy right there, btw. I can't wait to read it and I'm sorry that it took me so long to review. Work was murderous joy last night. I don't know if that made sense. -shrugs- Oh well. Just update now! K?

Later and stay awesome!

~Rena

woah i never seen dartz but he sounds scary. i can't believe seto and mokuba didn't get hte police already! i can't believe they went back to the hotel...poor steven i hope he's ok. i hope serenity treis to make up for what she did. she may have made mistiakes but its never to late to apologize. steven seems to be mature adn serenity's family seems mature too so i think they'd all be supporitve...idk good chapter update asap!

What?

I just checked the reviews of this story, and I can't see mine for chapter16!

Okay, lamest reason/excuse ever-believe me or not, but I distincly remember reviewing that chapter!

I remember commenting about how Serenity is being such a child about this whole situation, that if she's so dead set on not hearing what Seto has to say, then maybe she doesn't deserve to have a wonderful child like Steven in her life. To simple disown him in the first place was stupid, sinful and hugely immature of her, but to completely ignore him when he seacrhes her out?

To ignore her own child like that?

...Okay. You know I have issues, so I won't even start on a rant about how much I HATE people like that.

So, sorry about the missing review...I swear I wrote it. I SWEAR!

Scatter brained because I'm doing so much revision. 5 exams next week. :(

Gods...

Anyhoo.

On to this chapter.

I'm so glad Mokuba and Seto got some time in this chapter to just be brothers. Especially on Seto's part. I was really glad to see that big brother back, that he hadn't disappeared forever.

And Mokuba's nightmare showed how worried he was.

And now...you must know what's coming.

Dartz!

DARTZ!

NO! He's evil!

Don't let him get lil Steven!

I can't believe you!

Evil!

Gr.

Until next time...

Oh, and by the by, EVERYONE gets to a point where motivation to do homework is lost.

Except me.

Afterall, you can't loose whaty you never had!

-Ame

And another amazing chapter with an evil cliff-hanger! It was really great! I'm still uber proud of you!

Listen, any time you feel upset and really need someone to talk to, I'm always here for you., no matter what. I hate seeing you upset and I don't want you to ever feel as if you need to conceal it. I love you so much!

Also, don't feel pressured to update immediately. If you ever need to just take some time, I'm sure everyone will understand (just don't take forever though). And always, you are still incredibly talented. Don't let it slip away, ever.

~Alien D. I love you! o