Regarding the technical aspects, your tenses and word choice could use a touching up.
But TAT Alllennnn. The way you've portrayed Tyki and Allen here makes me so sad, especially Tyki, who apparently fell in love when he never expected too.
I feel like this is a very likely ending to Poker Pair, although it makes me so sad, because my OTP should have a happy ending. But they're doomed in most close-to-canon fics, since Poker Pair is technically an "enemy-ship."
But Allennn! Tyki, you jerk, don't just abandon him!

D: Poor Allen.

It's sad but it's a beautiful story )

I love this, because it could lead into a story.

Though the ending with Tyki saying that, that made me sad.

Great writing!

So sad... O_o

Heart breaker. Poor Allen (

Still, great job writing this again. I'd love to read more from you so keep it up

Aw... Cute~ 3

That was really cute. Poor Allen.

It was good, sometimes short and sweet is the way to go

Poor Allen, but it was nice, good job~

Please write more Tyki/Allen pairing .

I didn't have time to review when I read before, so now I've come back to review. This was really really cute piece of writing, although a little bit short. But damn, I'm really addicted to cute and short stories. Ahh, I'm making no sense, but anyhow: this was very cute and it would be so Tyki-like to say something like that. :)

Creepy,

but beautiful~

It's cute and so sweet!

It's not good, really. It's freaking amazing!

But I prefer if it's longer XD