Oh common where's the juicy stuff with sasuke X naruto

heh heh that was kind of cute! in a perverted kind of way.

1. Capitalizing names are good I encourage it even.

2. That sucked majorly. I had to read it like 5 times to even understand what you were trying to say.

3. all those 'gasp's are useless and redundant and Naruto wouldn't say it. He would do it.

This is baka

Wakarimasu?

Kimi wa Hentai desu!

Yeah... It's not bad... but I need more lime Pu-chan nanoda

it's not that short! put a better summary, loaads of people will read it! it's great!

Hahaha! Naruto should have seen that one coming!

Hi there... Very good... but you right in chat speak and you didn't capitalize the beginning of sentences in the quotations.

fine if it's no sugar for you how about a tastey lemon?

*kitty evil grin*

shany-chan