hello I am curently reading this story and I wonder not only why it died but also why are there no more reviews this is an awesome story.

In case you haven't abandoned this yet, I could beta for you.

loved it, it is well thought out. I can't wait to read more so can you please hurry yp ans wright more please please please

interesting.

it's a good thing you're going to get a beta as, no offence, you need it. your grammar and spelling are atrocious.

I realy like were this fic is going but on the idea of scrapping the first two chapters I would have to say not a fan they define what is happening and give you an idea of what Harry will be like in your storie. So onto the question about Dumb-as-a-door I very much doubt he would just let young Mr. Potter just pull out of Hogwarts just like that when he has such a big destiny in the wizarding world...

I like it so far. I really hope you keep going with the story and update. :)

No! Dont scrap them! They're good how they are!

cant wait for more!

I don't think you should rewrite it, I believe that it would make it harder to understand even with flashbacks. The story is quite good though there are a few grammar and spelling mistakes though almost every one has some of those.

There is something lacking, its all a sort of dry "and harry learnt this" type of thing. You probably need to space it out with filler, you could have done a lot with the exploration of the black manor and perhaps some human elements like conversation with Dobby and Marcus. You also probably need some other points of view in there, how his friends are taking his disapearance and possibly some Moldy Shorts scenes which explain why Harrys Occlumency barriers are assaulted with feelings etc.

First of all, this story is quite interesting and I plan on following it to it's completion.

Now, what I think you need is an editor, not a beta. A beta checks for continuity and such like where an editor checks for spelling/grammar/punctuation/etc. The continuity of your story seems fine, you just need to have someone check for the times your fingers hit the wrong keys. Keep on writing and I look forward to the next chapter.

Yes! Yes!

You really need a beta reader.

It's better then the majority of the crap I read, but I could barely even read half of it. Get a beta!

Signing off, Paranoid Lifio.

Long as he doesn't end up with Ginny or Hermione I'm cool with reading more.

Your call about flashbacks. Just hope you don't slow down with the rest of the story as this one is a bit original with dueling tournaments.

great story :D