I like it i think Annabeth is out of
character

This is really good

i liked it

Excellent fanfiction! I was impressed by the complexity of the emotions from Percy - not normally the most critical of thinkers - while still remaining within the constraints of the character shown by Rick Riordan.

One thing I would recommend, however: the rapid shifting of POV made it a little difficult to fully comprehend all of the emotion and the depth behind each character. If you want to keep the separate emotions of the two characters, I'd suggest using the third person.

Thank you very much for the wonderful story, however. I enjoyed it immensely.

~Sa Rart

This switching POVs thing is really getting old. Okay, Percy was sad about Zoë, but he didn't love her romantically. He was her friends, but he didn't like her as a friend, friend. OOC, flameworthy, and pointless.

is that the whole story? if so it was good but needed a better ending. if not then it's a good start and has petential. keep going!

It was short, but really nice. Short n' sweet, I guess.

It really good for your first angst fict! I LUV the percy jackson series! its cool to read what people have added on to it

I hope you right more

omg! i think you should go one with these kinda stories! u r really good writer. I always wanted to be a writer! so i think u have a talent!

Nice angst there, and congratulations on this being the 250th story posted on the PJO archive (I think but whenever I think I'm usually right (or wrong))

Give yourself a cookie!

Wow that was deep.