I love your storyline and concept, but sometimes it is a bit unclear and there are a few grammar issues. Maybe consider getting Grammarly?

sees chapter title

*opening 4 intensifies*

"winry's head was resting with her head" Sounds redundant and doesnt make sense. better off as winry was resting with her head.

CHEEZE ITS ARE FUCKIN AWESOME

I freaking loved this story! Gah! XD Thank you so frigging much for writing this!

THIS IS AMAZING

Reading chapter 4, and at the end the first thing that poped into my head was, "Damn it!"
I really hoped May would be in this!

just saying i teared up while reading capter 12, probubly because i was listening to November by The Wilderness of Manitoba

Is May in this story? I really hope she is, cause Al needs a girl, and i won't accept Al dating anyone who's not May!

Young love, don't worry all of us ramble.
Gosh I feel so stupid! I didn't even know that Riza was calling Roy by his first name! Come to think of it I always miss the important details.

Gosh I was so giddy when I started reading this, it was probably the mood of the beginning.
Anyways, I somehow always end up reading stories that are from 2 or 3 years ago but I just decide to review anyway.
Lovely chap!

I want to say couple of things about this story.
It's well written and readable so far. I'm interested how will it end. I will keep reading this.
Now the serious things. The alchemy in this whole story is written half-heartedly and very illogicaly. Those parts needs more details and something more original. Alchemy in this fanfic doesn't blend in and it looks not real. And now for the minor thing. You say that Ed's and Al's mom died in an accident, yeah? Well it doesn't matter, the only thing that matters is that Edward does alchemy without transmutation circle which can be done only by seeing The Truth, or gate idk (and ofc by having something with the circle like Roy's gloves and Armstrong knuckles) in original story Ed and Al saw it, and for that reason they can transmute by only clapping their hands, so I wanted to ask how come that Edward can do it? Eh?! Well sorry, I'm a perfectionist, so it bugs me a lot, lol XD
Ofc there was some typos and grammar mistakes, but it doesn't matter.
After all, I enjoyed this story. It's good for an easy read. I am personally an action lover, but I found this story interesting. So, yeah.. Good job!

Really loved this story thank you for sharing it with us! :)

Now off to read some more Edwin ;) Preferably your stories though hehe

ed and al's dad isnt an elric thats there moms madian name

nearly a 5 year Easter anniversary since this chapter came out.