I really liked how you wrote it, th descriptions are so lovely!

Haunting, stunning. I rewatched this the other day and it filled with my memories and remorse and a sense of my own mortality that only good story telling can do.

Why do we live so painfully?

Why are we always grasping at water, taking deep, gulping breath for a moment before plunging back in to that dark abyss, hands still reaching, until finally, fingertips collide with something tangible; someone else.

Obviously your work has made me want to write. . I guess Ill get on that then.

That was incredibly beautiful.

It was descriptive and complex and beautiful.

I loved the way you described the underground. It was absolutely lovely. Tragic, but in a way Moanna, in her naivety, cannot see. She sees the beauty, and not the sadness.

The most beautiful line was, "May I shape a sky for you? she asks, because she is gracious girl whose eyes are flecked with immortality and a disconcerting grasp of what it must mean to live forever."

It shows her childlike wonder of her ability to make a sky for him, and the way the faun gently goes along with it, all the while sort of hating this existence, while she doesn't understand why, because she doesn't understand the meaning of immortality. It's incredible.

This is lovely. It's a haunting and accurate view of these characters in a magnificent take of the underground. Thank you for a fantastic read.

oh god oh god oh god

I finally got around to watching this movie today and the moment I told Aiffe she linked me to this, and while I was not won over by the movie I fell very hard for this. The dark, otherworldly imagery was what I loved about the movie and I wished so much by the end that there was more of that rather than torture and cruelty. And now there's this haunting little story, which is everything I wanted and more.

It's impossible to pick out my favourite lines, but I'll try.

/across knotted canopies and wastelands and a distant coast thrashed by darkness/

This image is so clear in my mind I can close my eyes and be there. Wish I /was/ there.

/Glass vials hang on hooks and waxen stems, brimming with sulfurous orange ichor scavenged from the belly of the world/

I love this entire paragraph and 'gemstones make her heart heavy' but this struck me in particular because it's so alien and yet so vividly easy to imagine.

/he is a relic of the primeval record, still wedded to the vast sweep of deep time. They show the proper respect./

This literally gave me goosebumps. I stopped breathing for a couple of seconds. Swear to god.

/May I shape a sky for you?/

Such a short sentence, but with so much meaning and impact, framed beautifully by the rest of the sentence which follows it. The fact that she can, and the fact that she wants to, and the fact that there is no sky down there other than the ones she makes for them... all of these paint such a portrait of her and what she is.

And that last line. Insert long, long keysmash here. A perfect end to a perfect fic. I'll reread this one many, many times, I think.

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I ... think I may have read this before (back a whiles on LJ maybe?), but what the hell. You've awed me all over again with this piece. Yours is a priceless talent.

beautiful. Words are inadequate to describe your manipulation of this creation.

This is beautifully poetic and you capture the mood very well. Btw "the faun" is - I suspect - the Pan of the title.

Beautiful stuff. Your writing seems to mesh so well with the tone of the film.

Beautiful. I cannot think of anything appropriate to compare your work to; nothing seems eloquent enough.

I think finding you on FFnet got about the same reaction from me as if I'd found Rilke working at a bookstore. XD "What are you doing here? Shouldn't you be out touring the world with this incredible talent of yours?"

Beautifully written, though I wish there was something more to it, perhaps I am thinking more of an interconnecting theme, something to take back rather than a moment in time.

Oh, wow! You should write poetry. I know this is prose, but very poetic in a way. Your writing is so good; each word seems to have been chosen carefully to complete a beautiful painting that I can almost see. Reading that felt like time had stopped, because of the atmosphere you created. I'm putting your "experiment" in my favorites right away. Thank you so much for this little wonder!

Love it, love it, love it!

Each and every sentence is crafted perfectly and all the words you choose to use are pretty and appealing.

Well done!

-CultureVulture

Hauntingly and amazingly beautiful. The way you discribe things is pure poetry. Keep writing.

It's very fantasy like. Brilliant job!

Brilliant mate. Just brilliant. that was the best movie I've ever watched, and you have done it justice.