AWSOME

Love it though it needs some editing Because some of it doesn’t make sense

Kind of cute, but not too engaging. But I see you wrote it a long time ago.

Oh my god, 2007 was 11 years ago. I feel old.

I LOVE IT !

Wow! Well done! Amazing story, stayed up past 10 to read this and I love sleep! Write as much as you can, you're great! May the force be with you.

I love this story I hope to find more storys like this

It was a very heartwarming story, I enjoyed the interactions and comradery between the characters. There were a few spelling and grammer mistakes but they did not detract from the story. One thing that was "odd" was that Obi Wan's actions and speech did not seem like that of a 25 year old towards his "father". They were more suited to a young child, a younger teen or a lover. I know you said that Qui Gon and Obi Wan's relationship was that of father and son but their actions seemed "odd" for a father and 25 year old son, Obi Wan could be young and naive but he is a Jedi (it seems from your writing he has been in dangerous situations before where he had to save Qui Gon). And that does not explain Qui Gon's actions, he is a Jedi master and would not baby his 25 year old padawan

awwwwwwwwwwwwwww...

so cute

but not slash right?

if it is i will be mad

ok

bye!

Now that's how it all should've been! awesome story, brilliantly played out.

Very nice.

really loved this story! great writing.

Definitely redid to the better! I totally agree with that! Qui-Gon lives, Obi and Qui are still a team, love their close bond, Anakin is with Yoda so he will probably be alright, I jsut love this story! Would be great if you could come up with some kind of sequel! Maybe there is another big bad or Palpatine escapes before he can be executed? Let me know if you decide on a sequel or not, please.

Loving the story, thanks for the wonderful read! I lvoe Obi-Wan and he was fantastic in this story!

Okay, wow. That was just totally HOLY CHOCOLATE, but that was incredible! That was the most perfect AU I've ever read! There were just so many ways it should have gone differently and I think you nailed it! I also like that Obi-Wan was so powerful. He's my favorite character and I always thought of him as being better than everyone else, why didn't George Lucas see that's how it should have happened? The plot was the best eva! No joke.

Although your grammar leaves a lot to be desired. Other than that, it was PERFECT!

I LOVED IT! :D It was definitely a lot better than the movie! I loved all the qui/obi mush too :D

This is great so far! It's actually really hard to tell that you skipped a few parts because the rest of the story flows so well!

I found a few things that you may want to consider changing. The Hutt language is Huttese, and I'm pretty sure that the plural of Jedi is Jedi, but that's just me.

Did that even make something remotely similar to sense?