I was hoping that the Nemesis was going to rape her

that was really well writen...i just beat this part of the game yesterday and i thought she was going to die or something...LOL this is going to my favs...

Don't leave the story there...

You know you want to write more...

please...?

That was a nice novelization n.n;; I am usually very picky with Jill fics because she is like my AlterEgo o.O; but I must admit I liked this one because of Carlos reactions and Jill's thinking :D!

. Im generally not Ms. Serious stories, but I gave it a go and this was a pretty good fic!

Wow...very well written.

"Jill! Jill! Wake up! Oh Jesus, please wake up!" He begged desperatly, shaking her again.

But there was no reply.

Wonderful story, i love it! please continue it, its awesome!

Nice action sequence. Adding a whole fight before Carlos makes Jill seem more resilient and Carlos more useless- (who knew?). At least Jill got really beat up and even I was wondering Would she get out? Leaving me guessing if it would take the game's course until the end, that's good stuff.

Cool, I've played the game and this story seems to catch it perfectly. Keep it up, your doing good

Mamma Mia and all that stuff.

Jill is a hard nut. Who cracks others. Very lifereal and thrilling.

I guess the next one is about when Nemesis attacks Carlos first or when they are in the garbage room.

Keep it up.