Reviews for The Dark Wars: Empire's Plight
Last Harper chapter 12 . 6/23
I've really enjoyed reading this, well done.
As a side note take a look at the use of Buck and Ball, ammo at the Sunken Lane during the American Civil War.
Monster King chapter 12 . 3/20/2018
Great story I really liked it good job writing the story.
The Feisty Rogue chapter 4 . 12/22/2016
And he wonders why they don't trust him indeed.
The Feisty Rogue chapter 2 . 12/22/2016
Dumbledore disgusts me.
kim2012 chapter 9 . 8/7/2016
You're a real fan of the Sharpe series, huh?
Dionysus013 chapter 2 . 12/23/2015
I read that Harry was put in charge of 15000 men and i was ready to leave. Then I should also mention that the romance novel style writing made this so boring. Neat concept, felled by foolish execution.
BenignViewer chapter 6 . 7/23/2015
I know this story is years and years old now, and you have probably already learnt this and greatly improved, but some constructive criticism for this chapter nonetheless is:

You could use more 'show' and less 'tell' story telling. When you were describing Harry's appearance previously you used the 'tell' style a lot, and it's less interesting and engaging than demonstrating these things.

Don't indicate "Flashbacks" verbatim in a story. Also try to avoid using the same noun in a sentence.
Instead, for example doing something like this:
'...searing pain shot through his head, making him wince as he [clutched it]. He had the strangest sensation of falling even though he was now standing before a familiar scene...'
[insert flashback here.]
'He shook his head of the muddled images, immediately regretting it as the pain again* returned to the fore...'

*Using "again" here is optional; it's whether or not you wish to imply that Harry has had the flashbacks before/regularly or if it's his first one. It is a detail that this scene has the opportunity to show us more about Harry without it being told.

All that said this is a wonderful story, and I am greatly enjoying, and very interested by, the universe you have created for your Dark Wars universe.
biblioholic chapter 7 . 11/28/2014
Are there no women soldiers in the army?
Sammyboy94 chapter 12 . 10/29/2014
Love it
rlchala chapter 12 . 8/25/2014
You had me hooked by just reading the summary. The brief historical records at the beg fining of each chapter are a brilliant and fun idea. Although there wasn't much time for character development, you did wanders in creating and giving depth to your universe.

I'll be starting the next installment soon
Sirwalterbeck chapter 6 . 8/9/2014
by chance did you happen to read the Bernard Cornwell series which also happened to feature a rifleman called Sharpe?

i do enjoy a good war story and a cunning general is a wonderful bonus.
Tifah 98 chapter 6 . 7/20/2014
U r an AMAZING WRITER"! I soooooo love how u portray harry"! Plus im a BIG fan of harryxginny :)
Also I love that little war song at the end I memorized it!
Sammyboy94 chapter 5 . 4/30/2014
I understand the import the ME bullet plays in the story. But a normal 5.56mm from an M-16 or a 7.62 from an M-14 will still kill anything within 500 meters wizard or not.
FinalGuardian chapter 3 . 12/21/2013
SHARPE! XD HAHA! My favorite fictional military character.
sunneedee chapter 7 . 12/7/2013
Marvellous writing, wonderful battle scenes. If only the plot was better. The blind patriotism is starting to make me twitch.
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