Okay, who taught you how to write a story?

This is very poor quality. I’ve spotted multiple spelling errors and glaring grammar mistakes. Don’t even get me started on the way you write the characters. They are so out of their scope of personality that this very piece of writing is an insult to both the original creator and the characters themselves. Learn how to break up a paragraph. Educate yourself on do’s and don’ts of fanfiction writing. Get a beta reader (you obviously need one). Do your god**** research on a topic before putting the idea to paper. FOR THE LOVE OF GOD, LOOK UP HOW TO WRITE A GOOD FANFIC!

Super cool ;)

This is amazing... No, it's incredible! BRILLIANT! Best story I've ever read so far.

I think you just made me love Deidara even more! Also you made me LOVE ItaSaku! But DeiSaku s still always my favorite...

Anyway, this story gave me so much to daydream about! I was searching for a story like this years ago so today must be my lucky day(Night actually... xD) and all thanks to your amazing fic and writing!

The characters are not OOC at all like in most of the FanFic's, just a little... more awesome! I swear you made them more awesome! :D

And it ended perfect! Thank you for such entertainment! Please keep up and never give up! Best f luck on writing stories! You're the best! .

That was such a cute story! X3

Okay, maybe it wasn't meant to be "cute" ... but it was very well written and the most believable DeiSaku I've read so far. I wish it was longer! Plzplz write a sequel. :3

~sharneybob~

This is a really interesting, original, and well written story. I thought you ended this story at the perfect place. You're a good writer. Be confidate snd trust your instincts.

lol, i think i have found a new catergory of fanfiction: Mini-thriller. Thats what this ficcie is. It had me going OMgosh and then it turned out ok in the end. If theres a sequel then I can't wait! Don't pressure yourself too much about it though! Great little mini thriller, the pairings were fun! I like chapter 3: 'next time play monopoly!' Priceless.

Honestly I actually didn't like it.. I'm a big fan of sakura getting paired with quite a few of the missing-nin in the manga, and even a big fan of sakura manipulating people, but this wasn't one I really liked. It's a given though, that I'd have liked it less if you had made her manipulation actually work :P But I do like reading your work, so don't stop!

Yay! Great story. Please write a sequal. :)

hell yeh sequel would be soo awesume..but what the hell it would be your decision not mine cause its your story so yeh..but would love a sequel cause it was just that great..ja ne!

kawaii! nice job!

Two words Love it!So sweet and amazing relationship make more deisaku stories please!At least I'm honest I loved it awesome!

If you make a sequel to this then that will be pretty sweet, considering it probably be about Itachi trying to get Sakura back.

i loved how you ended the story and yeah, feel good story of the year. the last part kinda confused me but that was cuz i was scanning the words - they didn't actually register in my mind so i had to reread it. but yeah, it was definitely cool!

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It was good, but just a bit.. uhm anti-climactic.. o.o;

Aww...so kawaii! Wait...did I just call a story about akatsuki kawaii? Wow...yours is truely is an amazing story. But I wanted to see Sakura and up with Itachi. :[ oh well, you're the author, so I have to respect your story.