Vitani sounds so sad. Great poem anyway.

Amazing you should write a second one about her life in the Prideland

Great imagry! I also like the repetition.

Not bad! And I know how hard it is to get people to read poetry... But this is definately one of the best ones I've ever read! Cuddos to you!

I like it...it really shows how tough Vitani's early life was.

A great story. Very good.

Wow, this is really good! I like it alot!

This was very touching. I have to admit I am new to the ghazal, so I'm not absolutely sure of much, but what I did learn is that a ghazal has a miminmum of five couplets, the second of each of them repeating the word or words.

Still I do like how you did this, it was very touching, and I feel for the poor cub, which is what a ghazal is supposed to make you do, so good work.

When I saw the word count, I wasn't expecting much but when I read it I was amazed at how well it was done. I really enjoyed that. I really liked the repeated lines they sounded so powerful and strong. Again very well done. Keep up the good work.

P.S. sorry its taken me so long to read your work, I am extremely slow sometimes.

im impressed.

I've had a sudden craving to watch Lion King II for a while now...

Vitani is my fave character! I don't know why... -

Anyway, I thought this was really well written. Thumbs up!

I thought that was great! The repeating of lines really drove the poem..what a cool form great job!

I liked it. The two repeating lines were very melodic and its one of the few poems I've read with rhyming words that I've actually liked. I don't remeber Vitani from Lion King, so maybe youshould just put a small bit before with the itlacized you have about (quickly) who she is since the poem doesn't speak anything specific in way of names. You didn't under-sylablize or over so that' good. Each line is measured out, no word feels streched or shortened to amek the line fit, Props!

I like it. Vitani is a great character to show emphasis in a story or poem.

Wow! This is so sad. Vitani is my favorite charachter and I can only imagine how hard is for her living in outlands.

Great job!