I've noticed that theres a few times in this chapter where someone asks a question but you didn't say who asked the question.

I love that you gave Charlene a bit of Alice from Alice in wonderland personality,
I love the coincidence that Jonny Depp played both Willy Wonka and Terrence Hightop aka the Mad Hatter. After rewatching the 2005 Charlie and the Chocolate factory I started noticing that the fanfics that have Willy Wonka pretty well in character, I was noticing bits what seemed like Tarrsnce's personality in there... or more accurately bits of personality that was used for Terrance's personality that came from Willy.

OMG, Don’t change a thing. It is perfect. But I am curious how you are going to work Willy’s and his father relationship seeing that you left that out. Not that I mind. I really liked the ending.

lol, bring in The Little Mermaid.

I do like how you made Veruca go in such a different way than anything I have seen.

I don't even notice Veruca was even here during this scene until the end of the TV fiasco. Wouldn't she be making a snide remark or being shocked or something? I suggest giving her a few lines or mentions in the nut room part.

I wonder how Veruca's going to mess up now if there's no nut room part... This ought to be interesting.

I love the extra scene with the Oompa Loompas here.

What I don't get is that Willy Wonka clearly said children get the ticket and last time I checked 22 is not a child.

Tell me the pencils were Harry Potter inspired! Sugar quills!

Actually, from the summary it was quite obvious she was already a legal adult, you said the little boy was replaced by a young woman, if she was the same age, you could have just said little girl, it's called being fairly straightforward and being honest. I don't know why you would have had to explain it, also, she is working. How many children do people see with actual jobs? Don't mean to be rude here just pointing out the obvious, even if it did take reading between the lines a little! I need no apology, I already made the inference that she was older than 12, you needed no apology! You were doing just fine!

I like this but why do you keep changing the font? I would understand if its a thought or a flashback of some kind but its not. The font just changes all a sudden

Awww... I'm sorry, I couldn't finish the story, and then I wasn't at the computer for nearly a week!
Still love the story!

I love your use of those lyrics in this chapter!
However, you might want to credit Disney for them, I just don't want you to get flamed!

fluff fluff fluffity fluff :)