CHARLIE BROWNNN!

Lucy's POV is heartbreaking. It's just any normal day... until it wasn't. Loved how you explored the consequence of Lucy's "jokes." Especially loved how you included the sky in her thoughts.

It's official! Lucy is the bad guy in the "Peanuts" cartoon!

Liked it. Live stories where Lucy gets her comeuppance.

Ooooh. Wonderful job. I love it. Catch ya on the flip side.

To: Elena

what's your problem? If you don't like the story then fine, but saying stuff like that could really hurt someones feelings, so what's what you say! And your little coment about nobody wanting to read thus story wasn't true! Cause a lot of people liked it!

wow that is a bit extream lucy is only 8 years old gezz

Awww, this was so sad. I actually can imagine this happening when Lucy pulls the football away. *tears up*

And as for YOU, Elena, you might want to think things through before you open your fat mouth and flame people. There IS a reason for this story to exist-it shows tragedy can happen from a stupid prank. This, children, is why we should NEVER do something like that.

Beautifully written, even though it was sad. Keep up the good work!

You were a good man, Charlie Brown... Sigh, so much overcoming emotion

Very intense. Yeah, that would happen someday; just a little bit of Charlie Brown's bad luck added to Lucy's routine, and that's it.

I don't think she'd go jail because it was clearly a prank gone wrong, but still, it will hurt a lot.

Keep the good writing.

A great story. Very good.

too dark

Spooky. The 'tragedy' is physically possible enough to make for a good story. Would be very nice to see what happened next - ie, the legal scene and funeral.

Sad yet true situation. This goes to show you should not pull tricks on people, no matter how often you do it to them. One day, it might end up hurting them. One day, it might being 'The Final Prank'. -.-'

Very good job.

Hey, Wouter. That was a nice piece of work. Subtle... I liked how you touched on Lucy's view of how Charlie Brown affected the others in their world - and the way you used Snoopy was priceless.

Screw the other people and their negative reviews. This is a very nice piece of work that shows how accidents can happen, and how when mischief is afoor, how things can descend to a level no one even dreamed, and how the world can forever change in a heartbeat. Wht really puts the icing on the cake is that they're '

tweens'... and this will haunt them all.

The saddest part of all? Lucy is, in a sense, now just as dead as Charlie Brown.

Aww. That was sad. Well at least Lucy now knows she's in the wrong.

And Elena...did you ever think that someone with FEELINGS wrote this story? At least criticize work constructively instead of just spouting out flames randomly. And for your information, I liked it even if it was terribly sad.

But good job, Wouter Jaegers. The Writing Gods are smiling down on you from where Charlie Brown's kite is flying.