Overall it was interesting with the differing POV's but Roy comes off as nothing but a rapist. He constant ignored Al's protest (both in Chapter 2 when he rapes Al and in Chapter 4 when he grabs him), and you made allusions to the fact that he did that with Ed also (and again it didn't sound like he wanted to do it with Roy).

My overall advice is to change the genre or change some of the wording if you want to make it a romance. And if you're going for romance I definitely advise changing the wording so the relationships sound consensual, not forced.

As things stand now I advise adding and appropriate warning to the summary, not everybody likes rape fics. And nobody likes being surprised by a story that read differently from its promised summary.

This chapter only seems to confirm that Roy is a rapist.

This chapter is reminiscent of rape, you should add a proper warning or change the wording of it.

The end was a bit depressing :( Is there a continuation? It was good, but seemed incomplete...

Aw, sweet. n.n

Poor Mustang-sama, though. D:

But I liked it! It was good. :D

Aw...though honestly, this feels like there could be more to it. Does Ed honestly truly feel that Alfons is a substitute for his brother? :O

Actually, I got the ideas and inspiration for this fanfiction from two different Doujinshi.

the first is "Living Will", an Ed x Heiderich Doujin

the second was "Dolce", and Ed x Roy postmovie Doujin

;o; Both are so sad and so sweet. I love them so much and implore you all to look at them if you get the chance. I found them on the internets, actually. Wonders of modern technology!

Aw so sad...really. But it sounds strangely familiar. Possibly a line from a shounen-ai or doujinshi that I've read somewhere...

Still, good work.

interesting... keep it up

For as short as these are, I'm finding them interesting. Keep writing. I'm intrigued as to where this is headed.

-A