I thought this was nice and is there any more? Thanks for writing.

Sorry, this story had no point. Even as a lemon it was very lemony. Also use your spellcheck option on your computer, or at least a beta. And somehow link the events together better. It just went from a truth-or-dare game to a bunch of people having sex in different places to Hermione on a blind date. Even lemons have to be coherent to some extent.

If at first you don't succeed, try try again. In that case, try try again. Sorry if I sound a little mean, but what else can I say? I hope the criticism is constructive enough.

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

I don't think I like Severus so far - but certainly an willing to keep reading if you keep writing.

Happy New Year