rei smirking at her boyfriend shinji don't be like that i love you

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Wow. 'Dat ending.

That was an amazing ending, and I applaud you for it.

/applaud

You could cut down on the angst a little. It's good that there's a lot of angst - even though, yes, it IS generic angst - though the way the story ended wasn't really generic. The Commander suddenly showing up wasn't generic, nor was the whole comedic twist immediately afterward. This story isn't some great, profound epic that reveals to us the pointless tragicomedy of human existence, but it isn't necessarily generic, either. At any rate, it isn't BAD.

It's cute and funny.

If nothing else you made me chuckle. A nice, shallow read. Thank you for dropping the angst.

Bye

Ed

The ending confuses me, but other than that, good job.

Good Story. There's a lot I liked about it. I can sympathize with Shinji being just about ready to knock only to doubt himself and stand there thinking. Many a time I've been in the same position. I enjoyed the ending as well. I think awkward situations can be the funniest sometimes and this was a good example.

XFD

Winnar!

...Interesting...

A few spelling errors.

...Really, for such a 'genetric' idea, I've never seen anything like this... :)

OMG that was hilarious! you did a good job faking me out with the summary and the inner monolouge. thanks for the pick me up.

Nice little story!

I especially loved how you made Shinji's emotional turmoil so complete. I just love Rei/Shinji pairing. And just as an added thought, nice job with portraying Asuka (even though I thought she was so annoying in the actual series).

Be careful not to use "that" too many times as well. You tend to get wordy with it.

Good job, and keep writing!

this is a nice twist ending, and keep it going this can be a good mulitly chapter story, please keep it going

dont end this as a oneshot it has potential