That was neat! Beautiful work!

I like this version of Cinderella!

I really loved this story. You made Cinderella very real. Beautifully written, too.

Lovely, and quite well-written! I thoroughly enjoyed this, and am rather disappointed that it's only a one-shot! I love the characters and the relationships you've set up - would you consider writing more? Finishing Adele's story?

Thanks!

moonreader

Hello! I like your story, and I thought I'd review as I read it.

It's cool that you're keeping Cinderella as a French tale. The translations of the titles, the money, and the small bits that make it into conversation really ground the story well. (Oh, just read the end note. Even if you just did it because you like French, I believe the original Cinderella was, in fact, a French fairy tale, so that's pretty cool that you kept with history unintentionally. :D)

Also like the fact that her father doesn't love her-what a great non-cliched idea!

It seems almost like the ribbon-seller knows Adele's master ("She's no friend of mine"), but then he doesn't know that Adele's father's dead. Maybe it's just me, but that's a little confusing.

When describing the man in the shop, you said he had "dark, smoldering eyes." You might want to leave out the smoldering, why would his eyes be smoldering right now? She's a grungy peasant (even if she's a woman). And when he cuts off "I plan to ru-" you just leave it hanging. You could add something like "'I plan to ru-' He cut himself off abruptly and looked away." to make it flow a little better.

Interesting quirk, for your prince to be both shy and condescending. He's a prince, so he's used to looking down on people, but then he's really a shy young man with a pretty (even if a bit grubby) peasant girl (?). Cool! He's not a cardboard cut out! God bless the round characters of fanfiction and fairy tales! :D

It's Cinderella, so I won't say anything about the Stepfamily except that that was the worst of the clicheness in the story, but like you said: it's Cinderella. Thus, a certain amount of cliche is inevitable. I'm impressed with how well you avoided the cliches you could, though. I especially love your prince! Good story, nice read and grammar and everything. I hope I helped a bit with the review. :D

~Therese

This is very good, and I loved the characters. Would there be any way you could continue it?

that was really cool! the irony of it all is astounding, you know?

A nice piece, though it is hard for anything pertaining to Cinderella to be cliche-free. I like your spunky female characters though :)

Truly fantastic! Yes, this was not a monsodimensional heroine here! A little downtrodden, but one can still spy a small desire for something more. And yet she wasn't this spunky brat that so many Cinderellas become; she fit the role given to her by life. I was charmed by the book (being a book lover myself) and how she met the Prince. Subtle and beautiful!

omg I love it! Please update soon!

I like the characters, will you write more about the Prince?

It's a oneshot? I think you should continue! It's awsome

i honestly like this story a lot! the prince is a great book to meet someone over, especially a romantic partner! i really hope you continue this! i want to see what happens with adele and the prince. this really should not be a one shot.

Wow! This is simply, purely, totally, intriguingly marvelous! You can actually write! Not many people on this site can. And despite the many promises of Cinderllas with resentment and original personalities, yours is one of the very few to deliver. So Bravo! Keep it up and update soon.

That was really good. It was interesting how you actually made her really depressed instead of being all happen even though she has a really good life. Have you thought of continuing it? I think it could make a really cool story.