Wow. That was hot. Love the ending.

Lmao what the fuck hahhahab

Yay! The dark prevails!

Wow, now that was a story!

Really good story, great ending.

how ever.. I think you should not have used "omg" it would have been more appropriate to use the correct word otherwise it just sounds the way she's saying it ("ohemmgee" instead of ohmygod)

but other than that really good. : ]

I like it!

Not bad ) But you really should use a beta to keep an eye on spelling, grammar, punctuation- or at least proofread to keep out "u" and "omg". In my opinion, the story needs a bit more thought into the background- and also, I find Hermione just a tad OOC. But not bad.

I like the direction it went to in the end. Any chances you might write a sequel or something where you describe the whole process of her growing apart from her friends and in the end actually becoming a death eater? And perhaps also what happens after that?

I think you definitely have talent but there are some things you need to change.

For example, instead of writing "u", you should write out "you". Or instead of "omg", "oh my god"

You seem a little lax with capitalization and grammar, but your spelling is okay.

Overall a good story, you just need a beta.

:)

that was not as good as your other mione/snape fantasty one

but its good

i love your snape

I fucking loved it ! God only knows i love it when Hermione gets seduced by the dark side.

aww.. and snape never loves her? that sucks. oh well, least she can be with him, even if it means she'll be killed by her friends sooner or later. good job!

I have to say, your plot definitely needs work. If you're going to have Hermione give in like just like that, you NEED MORE BACKGROUND. I mean, what exactly would make Hermione have these dreams? There needs to be more struggle, ESPECIALLY if Severus is working for the Dark Lord. . And he would never call Dumbledore "old Dumby". No matter whether he's good or evil, even if he thinks he's a fool, Severus respected Dumbledore. Both of them were just...rather out of character.

In addition, your ending really didn't make much sense. Even if she gave into her passions for the one night, Hermione has a stronger will and and even stronger sense of right and wrong than to just go over to the other side like that over...not even love, but...great sex.

*winces* And please, I don't think I saw you do this in any of your recent fics, but NEVER have a character say "omg". They are allowed to say "Oh my God", but it's a crime against the English language to use "omg" in dialogue. This isn't meant to be a flame, and I'm sorry if it comes across like that. It's meant to be constructive criticism, and a lot of things cried out to me. I know that your characterization has improved, since I've read Fantasies, but it could still use some work, especially where certain characters like Ginny are concerned, I think. . If you have any questions, disagree with anything that I am saying about characterization, etc., or simply think that I'm being an unrepentant bitch, you're welcome to contact me. I won't be insulted if you delete this review, either.

Good story, and very sexy. Just use a spellchecker next time so you don't have so many errors.