God damn it. This is...ugh. I love it. I haven't read something so beautiful for a while so it's kind of getting to my head. I'm glad it is. I live to read stuff like this.

Wow, that was very interesting. All the description and repetition was great. Eventually I felt the same way although for some reason I wanted him to take her by the end. I didn't want someone to find her and bring her back, I just wanted him to have her. Meh... I guess you succeeded in making the reader feel the same way as her. Awesome job

Lone

Just..incredible

Oh this is my favorite of your stories so far! Have you seen the movie Labyrinth? I couldn't help but see the similarities in here with an Evil!Jareth from it...Excuse my ramblings if you have no idea what I'm talking about...

Again, this is really good - I like the manipulation, and the writing style of this one. Off to read Taint...

Keep Writing!

wow, im at a loss for words.

that was beautiful.

you are an insanley talented writer.

i loved it.

wow. that was amazingly deep and intricate and sinfully disturbing. i loved how everything was a paradox, it added brilliantly to the twisted effect. kudos to you.

funky

my god that was beautiful.

I was half expecting Violet to take him down like a sweet muffin..

I'll be looking forward to reading more of your works!

Wow, quite refreshing from most of the Incredibles fanfics, well, probably all of them. It certainly puts a different perspective on the meaning of pure and tainted.

You weren't kidding when you said this was seriously twisted.

Well, that was astounding. Wonderfully written, great wording- many theories and expressions so fitting. I love when unique pairings are described so well; so beautifully. I love that PIXAR inspires this kind of dark excitement- I love it.

WOW! Wonderful! Very dark, but with a possible hope at the end! I loved it, glad to see you writing again!

That was...really good. A great study of the human mind. The end was a little confusing...I think you just got REALLY into the whole stream-of-conciousness aspect. There's nothing wrong with that, it just makes it harder to understand.

-Rai

Beautiful. Twisted, yes; but beautiful. The characterizations, the way you get into each character's head... perfect. I really loved the ending when "death" and "rescue" are used oppositely - or, at least, what we would associate with their meanings are completely flipped. Death is rescue; rescue is death. A few minor spelling flaws, but those can be easily fixed. Other than that, absolutely perfect.