This is good please continue

please contimue, ive waited months for every update and i miss you :(

This story looks like it could grow to be very good, but I do not think I will continue to read it. You could improve the story greatly if you did not put the entire text in bold. It makes reading it a little difficult. I wish you luck in your future endeavors.

Dawnfire

Nice

very well written i hope you update soon

You could work on the plot a little. There is also a lot of spelling errors. By the way, if you're trying to say something about one person's stuff then the apostrophe comes before the "s" not after. I.e. Neal's protests, not Neals' protests. And why is everything in bold? Just wondering.

POOR KEL having to deal with discrimination and stuff i like ur story

You might want to get a beta; you have several run-on sentences. Also, I don't think the word "homely" means what you think it does.

loved it update soon :)

This was great. I loved kel and dom togather. Your plot was good and unlike many good storys i have read on this site it was finshed. :)

You write extremely well, I have been reading two of your stories at once. I love the part at the end of this chapter where Neal sees Dom. LOL

awesome story plz update soon i can't wait i'm sry about the decent lack of review but it's 4 am and i've had a realy long day

ja ne

keep writing

-shadow

Update ASAP, girly! That's such a brutal place to end it!

oh, I like it! update soon!

there's a lot of grammatical and spelling errors scattered throughout this, though. please be more careful about that, they take away from your story.

How can you stop there!

Update soon! (like really soon)