The first chapter would be much better with more details and by being longer. The poem doesn't make sense.

4/10

I didn't like this story at all.

i like both of them

nice

This is really funny,but write longer it's kind of confusing don't you think?

Wait, what?

this story is really good u should update soon

Here's what I thought of this story. I don't get it at all. I don't understand why people think this is funny. When you put "Toostie!", (which, by the way, is Tootsie, as in the candy,) I was thinking, Oh my gosh, this person doesn't understand that you put "Tootsie!" mom called blah blah blah. not, "Toostie!", mom called blah blah blah. You are spelling some words wrong, and I have to say, that I am so confused this might be why I am being so critical. Write your chapters longer too. I think that might help. Nobody likes a chapter three words long.

hilarious

I am so sorry. It was funny. The poem does not make any sense. Update sooner or later.

It's so funny! but you wrote the story short!