You should really try to finish this, its good.

This is great, i can't wait for more

"he practically sashayed into the room like an exotic dancer when he burst in."

Oh my god, i almost peed my pants laughing

Awesome, I love your story ;)

Is this for this story? If so, well, I confess I"m confused. Has me intrigued, however.

Powerful. I loved it. I'm increasingly intrigued. You must post a new chapter soon! :D

“I swear on my father’s grave that I won’t take more than bargained for.”

“Yer dad’s standin’ right there!”

Oh. My. God. I was SCREAMING with laughter at that part! Why does Fantine have to be so mean to Jack? Please update soon! I love it!

Woot! New chapter.. yay! Okay, had to go back and reread the beginning, since you say you've changed it. And yay for making it AWE compatible! :D But now I gotta review this way - totally cool, it's like old-school, before I got me own account! Anywho... onward!

Woot. Present-times abound! Ah, Louisiana. Forgotten treasure? Hmm.. And Jack's not sharing any tidbits about it. Bootstrap seems to have the matter figured, I'm sure. He has been with Jack through a good lot of what's happened with Jack and Fantine, though, so it's no surprise.

Will's definitely turned into a hell of a pirate. hehe

Well now. Looking that over, hearing the story of Jack with that Eye of Mazu, as well as referring back to the gypsy's words.. I think Jack's in for quite a surprise. Yay, I love surprises! But this will definitely be quite the reunion...

*grin* I love ghost ships, too.

'“Mama! Teague took my dolly!”

“Teague!”

“I’m James!”

“James, then!”

“I was just joshing, mama, I’m Teague.”' - a little Harry Potter influence? Love it! :D

Good gods, Fantine is quite the spitfire. Of course, Jack's helped turn her into such through the years now, hasn't he... haha I love how instantly she can turn from rabid to entirely happy, taking to the Turners and dragging them in.. only to throw Jack a really wicked look. *shakes head* One day, they'll see. I know it.

Amazing, yet again. I love this story so much. Update soon as you can, I can't wait to see what happens now! :D

:laughs: I'd forgotten how funny this story was! I'm glad I finally happened upon it! You really got Jack down, and the little subtle humor Fantine provides really makes the story enjoyable. I liked the last line. 'He liked her already.'

I'm glad you updated, good chapter!

Polka dotted llamas? I have one of those...good chap! I like Fantine and Jacks relationship!

That was great! Good job with the whole marriage thing! I love this story!

Bad Oopma Loompa! No! I love Norrington too! WHOOT!

*laughs uncontrolably* I love Ana in this! Good job! Onto the next chappie!

Ok... so I read through your 'mock' chapters... yes, yes... you did a very good job at making Marysue a Mary Sue. The trouble is, I can't really see what changes when we get to chapter 4 and beyond. I can't tell whether you are writing this with your tongue in your cheek or not.

It is written in a very twenty-first century style, which doesn't fit with the 18th Century setting. Both the dialogue and narrative seem anachronistic. I am assuming that that was not your intention... if it was then perhaps you should state so in your A/N at the start.

I think you could do with researching things a bit more. For example, in chapter 5, a woman is purchased for 35 shillings (just less that two pounds). This is about the value of a good bottle of wine or a couple of "trysts" with a prostitute. People (slaves) were bought for between 40-70 pounds in the 18th Century.

This just does not have the air of believability that I look for in a story. Maybe I have got the wrong end of the stick. I just can't tell whether you are deliberately writing it this way or not. It is not quite serious... but not quite a parody. Sorry :(

Well I read your message stating read chapter 4 before flaming. I have no flames and seem to have forgotten my matches.

So far I see Marysou as a "marysou." Shes so perfect as to be nauseating. And so the crew agreed. Im about to go read the chapter 4 that now leaves me in so much suspense that I cant wait to get to it.

Your characters are very much in character. The lingo your using is well spaced enough that its not redundant as some peoples gets. Only so many argghs can fit in each line of pirate writing.

I just want to get into the meat of the story. Keep writing. )