Reviews for Choosing |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I'm afraid to tell you, if you didn't know, that this story of yours, "Choosing", goes against the policy of this site. This site states in its list of works it won't allow based on other authors or publishers, "FanFiction respects the expressed wishes of the following authors/publishers and will not archive entries based on their work: Anne Rice, Archie comics[…]". If you really have to have this story up on the net, then upload it to DeviantArt or ArchiveofOurOwn or another site. So be a good lamb and delete this story from this site, or I will go on and tell someone who I know will take it down. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please continue the story. It was a really good one. And I really want to know what will happen next. Love, xoxo |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love the story. Please Update. |
![]() ![]() Betty needs to wake up and realize that Veronica is not her friend...always critisizing her for what she wears, telling her to move it, always stealing Archie away from Betty and making excuses, instead of saying I'm sorry. |
![]() ![]() Archie needs to see the error of his ways. Is he really so stupid to see that he's hurting Betty. |
![]() ![]() ![]() plz update |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great start! I'm loving your spot-on portrayals of the main characters so far! I wish you'd come back to finish this fic one day...it's too good to let it stay this way! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awwww incomplete! I'm always looking for more Bughead so I wish there was more to this story! |
![]() ![]() When are the new chapters coming out? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ack, it started before it got any good. Unfortunately, I don't think you'll be back to update it anytime soon... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Are you planning on continuing this story? |
![]() ![]() Jughead seems out of character- he needs a bit more development (more disillusionment and upsetness at Archie, more time really to develop your spin on the character) before you make him say "you disappoint me, Arch..." the phrase and lines afterwords seem really awkward for the character right off the bat. Basically in a first chapter the only idea we have of Jughead is from the comics, because a different Jughead hasn't been developed-and doesn't have time to develop-in one short first chapter. Really that's a line/tone of character to use after setting up the story more (3rd chapter I would say? maybe more because your chapters are short) so we have a better idea on who your Jughead is. Hope this helps :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() good job. you've gotten a lot of reviews. surprised you stopped. |
![]() ![]() Wow! I'm really enjoying this! Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like this quite a bit, it's original and... well, amazing. I love how you portrayed Betty and Veronica's friendship. Please continue on with this story. |