Couldn't help but think it ended rather abruptly, but it was still a good story nonetheless.

That was very cute. I liked the characterizations, also liked the ending too. Good job.

Heh, cute.

Aww, adorable ye olde timeline setting! I love the balance to this, Mithos' childishness, Martel's affection for Yuan, all very fluid and beautifully done. Though I think my very favorite was Kratos going as an older brother Ahahah, Oh Kratos.

Always moving onwards towards the main point, very typical of Yuan in the end _ Imagine Mithos' reaction if he caught that one XD

A nice moment for the four of them with good characterizations. Keep up the good work.

THE CUTENESS! A lovely little one shot, and quite well written, too. I have to admit, I really loved this part:

"What was that about, if you don’t mind me asking?”

Yuan still looked slightly bemused as he sat down beside her. “Of course not. Kratos obviously believes that every girl should have an older brother looking after her and just threatened me with serious bodily harm should I ever hurt you.”

*grins* That was great. Totally caught me off guard, and I loved it.

I thought perhaps Yuan seemed a little bit OOC with his last line, but then again, we don't know for certain what he was like back then, and it's so cute that I really can't fault you for it

Great story! There should be more YuanxMartel stuff...it's so hard to find...

*sighs happily* Ah...you did it again. Willow, willow, sorrow and happiness...*snaps out of it* All right, on to business!

The only thing I could actually complain about would perhaps be the sentence "They watched the world together for a few minutes, the sun, the sky and the light on the water, Martel was constantly aware of Yuan’s body beside hers, the rise and fall of his chest amplified by their proximity." Right about here [the light on the water, Martel was] the sentence becomes one that runneth over. Yuan's sudden forwardness seemed a bit strange at the very end, too, but that's probably just me. Apart from that, not bad, not bad at all.

Sure, who am I fooling? Gorgeous. You had all of their personalities laid out in minutes without any over-description, and everything about this-wording, length, dialogue especially-is just wonderful. Something I sincerely enjoyed. Thank you for this!

Aw, how sweet. I saw some missing commas and misspelled words, but other than that, your story was cute and sweet.

~Always Watching aka Eternity Memory

AW -squeaks with glee- YUIE! Martel Back when Yuan wasn't such a bad as- I mean, grumpy -shifty glance- That was so nice and just enough of love. too much kills me. I love this :) Favorite? I think yes!

How sweet! _ I loved it. Great job!

That. Was. So. SWEET! _ Oh! So beautiful! I loved it! Everyone was wonderfully in character. Everyone. Even Martel, she was kind and beautiful and somewhat girly. I liked when she got all embarassed.

This story gave me a pleasant serenity. Nice, peaceful scenery.

I know you probably won't continue this, but if you ever get a random inspiration, follow through! Simply wonderful!

Very sweet and well written. I liked it!

That was so sweet. I loved the way you characterized the four and those two...Yuan and Martel...I jut love it. So much better than my fic, "The Squirrel Killer". This is going on my favorites list, of course.

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