We all think Ogata's a pedo. Love the story.

AHAHA! I agree, Ogata does give off a bit of a creeper vibe, and I love this possessive Akira you've crafted too! Really, a sweet and well-written fanfic that I felt kept everyone in-character! I enjoyed it so much! Thanks for writing!

Aw!

How cute. Yes, I like possessive! Touya as well. It was very entertaining to read and you didn't make it angsty or anything even with the waiting for an answer thing. And Touya's proposal was so sweet. I liked the end too even if they didn't officially get together. It was obvious they would anyways.

There were a few errors though:

"Was it a daily occurance to see two boys literally chasing each other, or a boy dragging another boy?"

You spelled 'occurrence' incorrectly.

"Because when feelings run deep, they could not be reached with words."

'Ran' not 'run'.

"Anyone who attempted to make Shindou look at any direction other than his was considered a threat."

'Look in'.

"They both knew why but Akira wanted take the shadow in those eyes."

You missed 'away' in the sentence to make it 'take away'.

"At first he thought it was because of what happened with the pro exams but recently, he was thinking that this hostility was because they both want the same thing: Hikaru Shindou."

Consistency is a problem here. Since you're using past tense, you should stick to it so 'want' should be 'wanted'.

"The moment that the man complemented him as "cute", Akira knew already."

'Compliment' is for praise. 'Complement' is for matching.

"Why, for God's sake, did Shindou had to be so naïve?"

'Have' not 'had'.

"When he looked up, the emegency light was on."

Typo here; you missed the 'r' in 'emergency'.

"But there was so much passion behind every word Shindou had said in defense of the said Go player that one would think that they knew wach other intimately."

And again here for 'each'.

"...anyone would be thinking twice about appraoching him."

And 'approaching'.

"Usually "He's not yet home." or "He's already in bed." were her standard reply."

Since it's plural, it should be 'replies'.

"Of course not. Whatever lead you on to believeing that?"

'Believing' needs to have the 'e' dropped. And it should be 'led' since it's past tense. Actually it may sound better if the sentence was 'Whatever led you to believe that?' or something.

"He knew it was Ogata, clad in his usual white suit. Who else would possess immunity and revel at his glare?"

'Revel in'.

"Shindou suddnely clamped his mouth shut and clutched hadfulls of his hair."

'Suddenly' and 'handfuls'.

"The little face-off might just be a product of Akira's immagination but he knew, he just knew that Waya had ulterior motives on bringing his rival to this café."

'Imagination' only has one 'm'.

"And don't tell me you were already in bed or you weren't home because I happen to call you last night and it was you who answered the phone, Hikaru Shindou. With your nose pinched."

'Happened' for past tense.

"Beacause it's lonely on the top."

'Because' and I think it's 'at the top.'

"Not a yes but not a no either. Yet another exception. But somehwere between those words, there was a promise."

'Somewhere'.

"His rival looked at him as if he grew another head."

'Had grown'.

OMG! This was a CUTE fic.I LOVE IT.I DO love how possesive Akira is and how clueless Hikaru can OMG when I think Ogata wants Hikaru it makes me crack because I KNEW he was a pediolephie(sp?) bawahhahaha it really makes my day when Akira make a mental list of 'potential treats' great job

I love the story. Possesive Akira is amusing. Dense Hikaru is cute.

hahaha brilliant. love touya-stalker

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"No. I'm saying that Shindou is present so long as you make yourself scarce." Hahahaha, this fic is just too funny! I adore how you made Hikaru say the cutest things. And I love what Akira said to him about being on the other side of the Go board - that was so cute. Hahahaa,"courting." Man this was brilliant. FAVES.

I agree fully. Akira should be possessive...Hikaru is just to cute!

Splendid. Just splendid! I loved that so much, even though I usually go for the stories with happy endings. Heh. But this was truly superb, I just loved it!

And, how ironic, I started reading this while I was in Programming Class. :) Excellent work!

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That was very good, and funny. I liked it :)

Very beautiful. Some minor grammar mistakes, but nothing a good beta couldn't fix. I love the plot line, very cute. And yes, I love a Stalker Akira. Because Akira is so cute when he's possessive. I do hope you find it in your heart to write more AkiHika! I will definately read it.

Very cute

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"AWESOME!"

while Akira&&Hikaru ! inLove

Awesome job! I was laughing all the way; trust you to integrate programming key words into fanfiction... that's so damn awesome! Great work~~! D