cute

so they die together...

When Neji turned demon...

But Tenten never leaving...

i dont get it.

This is amazingly powerful. The imagery is fantastic, and the bits from Neji's mind-allegory and whatnot-were very Neji. The time changes were a pain until I figured out the pattern, but then it was very neat. *grins*

I'm opening a Naruto archive,a dn was wondering if I can archive this. If lets you see it, the url is

Or just e-mail me, and I'll send it to you. ;)

J

H-huh? x_x;

It was enthralling in the way it was written, but in the end, it just wasn't easily understandable - I don't think that it's that it went over my head.. I think that it's that it was too cryptic. O_o;

Wow. This is such a great story. Its sort of dark and mysterious and yet at the same time so clearly portrayed. I haven't gotten up to the cursed seal thingy with Neji, but I do know that he got cursed. So... Orochimaru was the one to curse him. I see, I see. Do continue to write more of this kind of stories because I simply love angst like this. :) And Neji and Ten Ten pairings rock!

WHOA GOOD GOOD STORY keep up da good work i dun fink anyone can critize dis story aniways keep up da good work(for da second time...)...

ur a gud writer, it almost made me cry

Wow. That was very...deep. It seemed like the whole story had this layer of fog over it. So hard to decipher, but really, it all made sense. Great great diction.

~Fallen Fantasist

This is some of the most beautiful writting I have ever read. No. It is the best writting I have ever read. There is nothing here I can critic. However, I would love it if you would continue to honor us all by writting more fan-fictions and if possible write some original stories.

wow

that was so good

i loved it

it was awesome

very good job

I can not possibly express how I feel about your fic... I feel totally speechless...

DAMN! I hate you, I love YOU! I I worship you!

I really love what you just wrote down there

that was...beautiful...

Such a bitter sweet story with good metaphors involving birds, which was very appropriate i might add. Once again very cryptic, totally loved itP

You can really maintain Neji's character and for Tenten, you made her into a knight instead of a damsel(analogy from TFTP/the frog and the princess).

I love everything you write!

~dobyuk princess

Technically, I love it. The writing is, well, great. I don't know what else I can say.

Personally, I like the Neji who follows his own light rather than being consumed by his own darkness... and dragging Tenten into it is just sad. Of course, I suppose that was the intent.

I wasn't quite sure from reading... does he get the curse seal on purpose, or was it placed on him against his will? Is his betrayal for seeking the seal, or for keeping it secret, or is it a betrayal of the self?

Anyway, you're a first-rate writer for atmosphere and mood. Great job.

Wow... that was very complicated... took me several times to figure out what it meant ;D

Very good though.

Stunning. Abso-freakin-lutely stunning. There are no words to describe the awe I'm in after reading this sory. It's completely original and amazingly memorable. I actually read it last night, and it was in my head all night.

Geeze, I wish there was a way to write all that I feel about this masterpiece, but all I can do is beg you to write more!