I love Haru. I love this poem. Need I say more?

Amazing, stunning, beautiful! "Brava! Magnifica! STUPENDA!" I, too, feel sorry for Haru, but I prefer his 'black' side. *smiles.*

::Moos in reply:: It's good,::lectures like Hatori:: but the form needs a but of work...

::turns into Haru:: Aw... this is about my sweet yuki...

::turns into Kyou:: Damn it Haru, quit acting like that... it's scaring the hell out of me...

::turns into haru agian, Black-HAru:: Shut up you stupid cat...

::turns into Tohru:: Um... you guys please quit fighting... in any case it was a good poem...

*weeps* Poor, poor meushi.

Dearest, you've suceeded in making me cry. :) Such a love Haru has for Yuki. How can they not be together? 'Tis meant to be, I tell you! At least I think so. Though I am not opposed to other pairings involving Hatsuharu and Yuki, the two of them together is my all-time favorite. Thank you for writing such beautiful things.

Anyhow, I am supposed to be commenting on your poem, ne? It was very well written, to say the least. You managed to create a smooth flow between the lines without rhyming, which is often a difficult task. The content itself communicated how Haru was feeling very well. I love it. Keep writing! *huggles you and poofs*

Great poem! I can just see Haru sitting down and deciding to write all of this...I have to say, I feel bad for him as well. _ It's so true-I don't hate Tohru or anything but she just comes in and sweeps Yuki away from...HARU! [_() Haru's so much better than Tohru!]._. Hm, it appears we share many of the same views on Haru and Yuki-not to mention Tohru. Feel free to e-mail me. Great poem...I'm heading off to read your super long fic! XD

;-; *sniffle* Poor Haru-chan! *hugs Haru*

This is really beautiful

good.

just aw!i want to hug haru

just aw!i want to hug haru

aww poor Haru-kun!

he loves Yuki so much ;_:

nothing against Tohru

but he does try so hard and Yuki only ingnores him!

WE LOVE YOU HARU!

WE LOVE YOU!

Bye-cha o

PS i'm so so so so sorry i took so long to reply! GAH I'M SO STUPID! i loved it though!

I enjoy that. It's logical that he'd be upset that after trying so hard to give back to Yuki what Yuki gave to him, Haru would be a tad upset when some strange girl comes in and turns things around for him completely. I know I'd be a bit pissed.

I think, in the end, he'd be happy if Tohru and Yuki were together, but he'd probably resent her all the same.

*sob* This was so sad and touching. Poor Haru...

sweet.

Heya,

This is really good. It sounds like a good lead-in to a fic, but that could just be me and my wishful thinking! Yuki/Haru is one of my favourite pairings when it's written well, and I think you've really managed to capture how he feels here- he doesn't really dislike Tohru, but he dislikes the situation she's created through no fault of her own, and that's a really... uncomfortable place to be in. Most people seem to dodge the issue of Tohru altogether when writing anything Yuki/Haru related; it's really nice to see someone addressing the issue even in a one-shot like this.

Gotta blaze,

~Kiri~

I thought this was a very sweet poem, & the feelings you portrayed in Haru were very believable, & they made me see him in a whole new light.

~She kidnaps his smile~

My favorite line. It's just so lovely... This -poem- is lovely. Beautiful, even. I love it. My compliments.