I usually loathe OCs... and time travelers... but, my god, your writing makes everything just *work*! You're the only author I've ever read that's been able to get me to get attached to an OC! You're a wonderful author, and I look forward to reading more of your works!

i really enjoyed this story! its kinda like an Au fic (alternate universe) i wonder how different the story would be if Smegol had a girl in his life before he found the ring?

Aww, it's over! *cry* I really liked ur story, I thought it was so sweet! but I don't like it how u just ended like that. It should keep going! I read other ppls reviews and they're like 'Mary Sue' but I like Mary Sues! I think it's cool when u get another character and stuff...o well don't worry I like ur story! I just wish it didn't end so quickly and like that. O well; overall, ur story is great!

"Can I keep you?"

That was a line from Casper, correct? VERY well placed, and it brought tears too my eyes. Strong story. Strong characters.

NO! It cannot be it... dun dun dun... the end! Wahh!

Heh.. nothing wrong with your fanfiction, of course, but "coarse" is spelled "course". Just helping you out here!

Do you like country music or something...? Rawr.. I hate it. Oh, well. Your choice. lol.

Hiya! This is the same person from Like Father Like Daughter?~ Hee. Pointless message again.

Mary Sue.

Mwahz! That was TEH cuteness! Mary Sue or not, I really liked this story. _

Hey There!

Wow, that was the first Smeagol centered fanfictino I've ever read...very interesting. But you left me hanging at the end. I mean, what happens when the ring comes into play? I guess it doesn't matter, but then again it does. Oh well! I'll live I suppose. I thought it was a really sweet story. All the swearing to God I didn't appreciate too much. For one, being a Christian I don't agree with people doing that. Also they don't really have God in Middle-earth. I know there is some god-like figure that created it or whatever, but they don't call it "God." Or at least I don't think they do. I think you might have put in a couple other bad words which could definitely be taken out without messing up what you were trying to portray. The only other thing I could think of was her being short. It was just hard to picture a 'normal' girl like that being short, but still staying the same shape I guess you could say? I dunno...

Anyway, I really did enjoy reading it and I'd like to know what the deal with mary-sues is. I mean, from what I gather it's a female (obviously) character that falls in love with a character from whatever story the fanfiction is about, and who is pretty much perfect, etc. Why is that so bad. I mean, do people want us to write about not-so-pretty girls? I just don't see why it's so bad to write a romantic tale about a made up character and one taken from a story. I, for one, really enjoy reading "mary-sues" Especially if they have to do with Legolas (and sometimes Haldir). I'm a huge fan of the girl-falls-into-Middle-earth ones if they're not stupid..I mean, I want one that actually has a good story line and plot. I'm writing two fanfictions at the moment, both probably in the category of Mary-Sues. I don't know if they're good or not and I haven't posted them so I'm not getting feedback. I will post them when I finish though. Hopefully that will be sometime soon.

So now that I've written you a novel...Write More stories like that! You could do it with a different character *cough* Legolas *cough* but I'd read another Smeagol one!

Much Love!

P.S. My email is miss_moody05 I don't have that as my email for my account on and since I don't have any stories posted and the email I use for the account isn't visible to readers, no one can get a hold of me (if they wanted to). Anyway, I'm really letting you go now!

You update too quickly. You'll overwhelm your readers when you do that. One new chapter every couple of days is a good pace.

Write slower, as well; you'll catch more mistakes and the end product will be much better. Write the chapter, wait a while, go back and proofread, wait a while longer, then go back and expand on what you have. Proofread a final time, and you're done, hopefully.

If this doesn't make sense, feel free to email me and ask. My address is on my profile.

-this be The Karlminion, and he be signin' off-

Smeagol-mance...now that has definitely got to be a first... Hope-Anne is a Mary-Sue, if you don't mind me saying, but the plot is good. Normally I loathe "girl falls into M.E" stories, but this one has potential. Cheers!

O_O! A Smeagol romance! Whoa...

Well, it is a Mary Sue, and I've never liked those, but it isn't bad... the plot is intriguing and original, although it's not really my type of story. Your grammar and writing style are good too. So, keep it up! You could be a really good writer!