wow, that was hard to read, you really arent an english speaking or writing person, but your stories really nice!

I love it5...but i'm so damned confuzzed at the moment...

-glomps- you updated! *o*

wai! Bryan could not protect Yuriy? ToT

aw...:( i remember -well sort of- when i was at the airport with my family to pick my grandmother, he told me to pick up this suit case. we left the buidling and..the security grabbed us O_O T_T i was so scared, they took my uncle away and he just said...it wud be ok T-T i was ok afterwards but i was so scared!

che~ stupid policemen ~_~ homophobes...

yeahh...kai felt really guitly neh?...

aww...oh dear :( Kai goes byebye

hm...to kiss him goodbye..

._. how sad

:) update soon pleash

TA

sorry, i didnt find your story before. i cant beleive i missed such a story! keep it up and update soon!

Miako6

Poor Kai. Poor Yuri. Nothing ever seems to go right for them. It was sweet how Kai wanted to go becayse he felt so guilty. But he could have thought about how Yuri felt, it was obviously not what he wanted.

well.

that chapter was just...

ok.

I liked the chapter, of course, I always do *hugs*. the scene with kai going away was kinda sappy, but once in a while I can love a good sappy (I mean, even depressed kind of sappy... angsty rulez but sometimes one wants to change ne?)

especially if you write it!

oh, and Yuriy was so nice, I mean, sacrificing himself... (he's gonna do that ne?) he's lost every will to live has he not? *grins*

well, see yah soon (eh, soon -.- two weeks without being able to stress you, so sad) and I hope you will post another HOW instead of another FIRE... *prods you* now I want to know what happens next . don't leave me hanging! PLEASE! Or I'll go crazy about it! *spazzes*

MF

that was so sad, update soon pls

aww, poor Yuri!

Kai just couldn't take the guilt anymore.

Did Kai send for the police or did they just find him?

Lets hope Yuri's mission is a success!

Dark Kaiser

Plz update 'cause this is so good

wanna know more about kai 'n yuri 'n the lemmon was good

so plz plz plz with cherry 'n top update!

This is really good!

What happened to Kai?

Please udate soon!

I love this fic

P.F.T.F.

Still messy, but still cute.

Sigh.

Um, the promise they made when they were little will cause a lot of problems. I know that. They are going to get revenge on Kai, are they? Yeah, they are.

There are some phrases that does not make much sense at all during the chapter, but the general meaning I can see.

it's not bad, I like it. I only wish you had less messy style.

PA

Oh my God, you actually changed the lines into more good looking ""! I am impressed.

Don't you see how much easier it is to read, since lines are used to add intensity to a phrase?

Jeez. Oh, look, again, filled with messy things, and OOC. Ok, ok, is not that I dislike it, it's kinda cute, but I think you can do better, by the looks of your one-shot up there. That was good.

Anyway, at least the plot is not overused, so one can read without being bored to death by it, and your writing style, though messy, is fairly improving since the beginning.

PA

ah, I know I am critique, but quoting FF, "it is extremely helpful to use this opportunity to comment on an aspect of the story that can be improved. A well rounded critique is often the most rewarding tool for the writer". So, don't complain. That means I am interested. People that review only with "upd8 soon" don't help at all.

still, those lines! Did anyone protest on them?

anyway, it is still messy, but it's getting better as story plot. the thing about the kiss was a little made up. I know Russians do that, but still, the way you put it down was awkward.

Anyway, Yuri looks like the ukest person I ever met. Sigh. So OOC. Even if someone raped him, he's not that weak.

...

let's see how's next chapter. After all it's not bad.

er... again, messy writing.

but someone told me to read this, they said it was good and with original plot. until now I see much messy writing, few messy sentences, and strange lines in the speech.

but I kinda like the story, it's cute. I just think, they are quite OOC. But anyway, I like it.

PA

mh.

strange prologue. what's with the lines?

sounds interesting, but tune down the messy writing, kk?

PA