I think this is beautiful. Great use of literacy skills and such a beautiful songfic, I wanted to cry. Again... just... just beautiful.

Very well written. The closest thing to a Songfic I have ever read AND enjoyed. :)

Very nice. Good use of literary techniques. I could really see in my mind your setting. Is "She" a dream lover of Obi's? I'd love to read more!

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Incredible... just... incredible! It's...

*shakes head unable to find words*

*reads* *loves* *applauds* *worships author*

Ah! I wanna be the woman talking to Obi-Wan! That's so sad, how Obi wishes he had kids... He does, doesn't he? From the line, "You hear the happiness of children, Obi-Wan, and wish it were your own. That they were your own." I love it! :) And maybe you could write something about how the lady came to be in our fav Jedi's head? Or is he an ex-Jedi now...? *confused* I've never seen Star Wars; I only got into it after reading a fanfic done by a friend. :)

Simple, yet deep. Good. A little detail can go a long way. I enjoyed it for what it was.