I do love this story, but reading it again years later and older, it seems a bit too dramatic. It would probably be best to go over some chapters and tone them done a bit (especially Nami's tears, just a bit), and at least let spring and/or summer pass. This sort of thing is too soon for only 5 days. however, you got the romance in chapter 8 down great! I love Jack's random kisses.

Hmm, could you please update? This may be a lost cause, but I'd still like to see this story come to life again. Jack's so romantic. :)

Aw, don't delete old chapters or stories of yours!

When you read them later on, yeah, you think "holy shait, I wrote a load of dung here!", but then you can realize on your own that you, indeed, make progress!

I read all 8 chapters in one go right now and I've got to say: Sometimes you start so many following sentences with "I" but it got better. So, yes, you're already improving.

Only thing I'm wondering: If Nami cut herself, wouldn't anybody notice her scars on her wrists? Because as far as I can recall (Haven't played AWL or AWL for Girls for a while now) she doesn't wear gloves or anything.

And you sure turned Muu into a slut. XD

Never thought of her like that .. I like the hinted adult-scenes like when Chris came. Had to think for a second who Chris was, first thought of Hugh .. close, but wrong. XD

C-A

This review is really, REALLY late, I know, but I just had to give my words on this brilliant chapter.

So bloody grand! The words, the self-questining, the romance! THIS is what a true fanfiction is! Something that is worthy of publishing such as this doesn't belong on nay, it belongs in the series itself! You, my friend, are a true master of fanfictions.

I know I am very late in saying this, but I wish you luck in everything you do.

Oh, I like this story. It captures Nami perfectly. I await the next chapter! D

It is a great story and I think the first chapter is really good. Not like the other boring ones. XD

This has been favorited. :D

I really like this fanfiction series, please update soon.

_ We, it has been too long. Im glad to see youve decided to continue working on this, so keep up the good work. I hope you get another chapter out soon.

OMGOSH! WHAT HAPPENED! *SQUEAL* you are a great susppense person! keep it up

i love your writing styl. but, maybe you should make the chappie's a little loner...*not like I can talk* i also like your way-of-words. how old are you...?

Awsome story. and um... too dark to write a real review. so just update soon and hope I don't read it at 12:00am again.

This is a really great story! I'm adding it to my favorites. Please continue to write this story!

Hey, I love your story, I hope you finish it. Your a great writer. Wish u the best. God bless. :)

LOVE IT! You keep getting better and better. I've really injoyed watching you talent grow.

You're back! YAY!

I'm sorry to hear about your mom getting cancer. That must be rough.

On the positive side, I loved this chapter! It was so addicting! The emotions just leaped out at me as I read it. Great philosophy about love, too.

I hope you update again soon. This is by far my favorite story on You're the greatest. If you ever need help with ideas or anything, I could suggest a few to help.

Later tater!