I'm not going to offer to take over for you for several reasons, these being A. I wouldn't be able to write it as well, B. I haven't been able to get my stupid buggy copy of KotOR past Taris in years and have therefore forgotten the canon, 3. I already have twelve or so unfinished stories that are trying to murder me with their individual weirdnesses, and D. I've never written a KotOR fanfic, never mind a Star Wars one, before and therefore am not sure what I would do with one. But I will make one plea, if it matters- this plea being that please, PLEASE, do something with this. It is far too good to be left on its own.

You could always try playing the game again. :P

I could try- I repeat, TRY- to go through the walkthrough of the game, try to assimilate the characters without actually having them all spread out for me, and attempt to take the story under my wing if nobody else will, but only if nobody else will and I manage to subdue the plunnies who are STILL bugging me- or, alternatively, not bugging me- about all the random crap on my little chunk of the site. And if somebody does rescue it for you, please tell me. Like I said, this is far too lovely to go to waste. But I will say again, if I said it before (which I'm not sure- I tend to babble a bit too much. Can you tell?): I would much prefer to see it out of you. You've done a brilliant job so far.

And personally, I don't really care all that much if you start seriously deviating from what is KotOR, as long as something happens with this... -trails off-

Be seeing you.

Whew. It's been a long time! I need to apologize again, I am a horrible person for inflicting a partially complete fic on you all. I can honestly say I haven't done anything like that before or since, though. I should probably have taken this down, but... there are just too many cute moments (see beginning of chapter 5 for my personal favorite).

I just wanted to thank you all for commenting. :) And I appreciate the very thorough review, Freesourceful, it's very heartening as a writer to hear. This is definitely a right in the middle moment... when I played through KOTOR, I just absolutely fell in love with Manaan. It's so beautiful.

So I rather lazily assumed all the KOTOR backstory (with, on a reread, a lot of unspecified angst on some of the other planets I probably should have explained) was part of my story's canon. That's part of why I stopped updating - it became pretty obvious to me that I really just wanted to rehash the "good bits" and gloss over the boring ones, and it was rapidly becoming impossible to follow (and definitely not KOTOR anymore).

The fic just might be best considered a "snapshot" of the middle to late middle gameplay of KOTOR... with, er, some extra bits, and no, I don't know what the heck I did with the real Manaan plot.

Oh... and about that window... this has bugged me for like a year (no, seriously, it has), and I feel I owe you all an explanation. You see, it's one-way safety glass. Completely impervious from the outside to the crushing forces of the ocean depths, yet extremely fragile on the inside (especially when exposed to UST). See, when the Republic was throwing the base together, they were short on funds, and it was cheaper than two-way safety glass. And they figured, meh, what UST could there possibly be among a bunch of boring scientists?

I hope this clears everything up. Thanks again for the kind reviews. :)

Well, this review probably comes about a year too late, but I really enjoyed your story, so I'm going to lay into it anyway. Maybe it'll be helpful, just in case you ever decide to come back and write it (or another fanfic) again.

First of all, I think you strike a nice pace and I like your take on the characters. Those little details and sublte moments you've created really add live and reality to your story. You make such grear use of descriptions of mundane things like: "Incongruously, a folded blanket sat neatly on the end of the medical slab," or "Her fingers were clumsy in the glove," that add texture and "realness" to the setting.

Since we begin in medias res with the story however, I really don't think the moment of passion between Kirre and Carth is quite as good/intense/meaningful as it should be when we hit upon it in Chapter 3. I like when you build the conflict between them, and moments like "She smiled, suddenly, one of those wry, lopsided smiles that seemed to go right under his skin," are written not only for the sake of Carth, but for the sake of the reader as well, because it's in those moments when we see Kirre through Carth's eyes that we start to understand why 1) she is lovable and 2) he is attracted to her. But even though chapter one and two built up some nice tension between the two characters, when the two come in Chapter 3 while trapped... well, we haven't been with the characters long enough for them to earn the emotions you require to make this scene truly good, and it's nowhere near as charged with passion and tension as it should be.

In other words, I don't buy that the two characters feel so strongly aobut each other, especially in light of the terse dialogue between the two leading up to this moment. And after all his little protests in his own mind about how much he dislikes/likes Kirre, I also don't buy that Carth suddenly turns so gentle to her, thought it seems to make sense that he'd flip right back to being mean. (Incidentally, who are you refering to in the line: "She couldn't really believe that she was destined to die here, at the bottom of an alien ocean, while those she loved waited for her to return in vain." Who are the people who love her? - it hasn't been established yet.)

It's really not so much a complaint about how you've laid our the story as a big complaint that you've started the story too from the beginning and we have have to play catch up on the characters' emotions. The drama that plays out on the chip in Chapter 6 is really well-worked and I love the little scene between the two at the end. You really make these litle moments work! not to mention "Ancient Jedi healing technique" made me laugh right out loud.

Thanks for the read, and for sharing what you have!

Yeah another fun fic

OMG! I love you! oh no i don't. i was talking to the story. :)

By the way, can you change your fic classification from Miscellaneous RPG to Movies - Star Wars? I'm managing a C2 community, would like to add your story, but can't, not as it's now classified...

I love this fic. I really like your take on Carth, and the Hrakert Rift episode was really chilling. (Although those windows sure are fragile, to be destroyed by stray blaster bolts when they should be capable of sustaining the weight of all those however many fathoms of water...)

I really wish you'd continue this, would really love to see what Carth and Revan go through after the Leviathan, but I suppose it's not to be, if you're not planning to. :( (I hate it when fic authors start out so damned wonderfully and then... stop.)

hm...I, for one, am very interested in what happens next. It doesn't really matter how much of a fic is actually written, you know? i just want to hear more! If you don't finish it, that's okay. i have a grand total of 0 stories, so I can't really complain. So, upload what you can. *I* will read it.

Oh, nice fic! Very readable, and very eerie/frightening scene on the ocean floor. As everyone else has said, love your take on Carth.

I know it's been a long time since you updated, but I do hope you'll continue this one day.

Cute. I like it, although it would *definitely* throw a hitch into the plot line-I mean, imagine the Leviathan, after that? I don't suppose you'd write a little something about that...could be interesting...

Anyway, I like it. Very true to the characters, and very nicely done. Looking forward to hearing more from you in the future.

...and? What happens next?

*pouts and gives large hug* So incredibly horribley sorry I took so long to review! Forgvie me?

Heh, yes, it does make him much sexier! I loved this chapter, and I feel bad it took me a while to review. I hope there is more coming, because this story deserves to go on! It has a different viewpoint than most stories have, and could be a lot more interesting since you picked up about halfway through-ish.

ooh, a really nice story you have developing here. Like the other reviewers have said, its nice seing a slightly different Carth but even nicer to see them getting together :)

Great story so far. Just started reading it and I must say i realy enjoy it. Your version of the underwaterstation is a lot scarrier then the original. Keep it up.

I agree with the others, it's cool to see a different take on our favorite flyboy. Keep up the good work!