This is a very interesting idea. I think you got into the flow of it more near the end- the beginning were more choppy and OoC.

KrisEleven~

Great story! I like all of their points of view, very well done. l'histoire est trés bonne! Etudiez-vous francais à l'école? J'ai l'étudié pour beaucoup de temps. Aussi, Dans votre "profile" vous dite "Lady Amelie (le Grande)". Je pense que "la grande" est correct, n'est-ce pas? Bonne chance, et continuez à écrire!

~Caremel

amazing! i love this. i never thought about how people saw aly. creative idea.

LOL! are you SURE you didn't steal that from TP's mind? *grins* that was great! we need more stuff with Aly on this site!

O VERY NICE VERY NICE! This is exactally the thing i have been wanting to read -~ ya gotta update! (maybe after try to do the Tortall character's opinions on the new Aly and here very special friend Nawat.) -

hm... interesting.. i like this... u've portrayed the characters well.. they're not O/C at all. Well done!

Very good. Leave this as a one-shot. I have a challange for you. Try writing a story that dosen't say who is talking. Have a plot and everything, mabye give names acasonally. I can't write that, I've tried and can't. But I think that you could. Again very good writing.

i love this idea! it's so different. please continue writing.

OOh, I really like this. It's quite good, although it's simple. However, it may be helpful to state when these thoughts take place.

Tamera Pierce is my Favorite Author. You did a pretty good job. You should try writing a whole fiction for the book. The Lioness quartet is a great series to get fictions from. The only thing about this is it's kind of short and it seems like it's been cut to the bare minnimum.

Hehehe... it me! _ you said read... and i read. Bohaha. now... my ideas for you would be to go into a bit more detail than you have, use specific events to tie things together. and don't grimince at me, you WILL have to look in the book! (If you lost your copy you can borrow mine) hehehe, if you need any more help, e-mail me other than that, great start. (i am so jelous, can't wait untill i get an account.)