really? there are people who put love and talent together? what the fuck is wrong with them? it reminds me of dorian gray "falling in love" with an actrees and them he leaves her because sho wants to stop ...

your writing is perfect,i'm used to write in third person but first is nice too

Aw, that was short and romantic. Such a sweet little story! I hope you do more!

i liked your story a lot, thanks :)

Beautiful piece, I love it. So smooth and flowed so flawlessly, not awkward at all. I didn't pick up any grammer errors either.

Hee. Interesting read.

Pretty good story... I really mean it!

this was a nice simple fic.

not as much yaoiness as my silly yaoi-fangirl mind aka chii-chan had hoped but it was still a really nice and simple story to read.

i really liked it.

_ Kari

great story *sigh i rele wanna write like this i have a small idea for a kawaii story for aki and hika pairings but i cant get it into words. do u have any ideas on what i might be able to do j/w anyways wonderful story keep up the good work,

very nice. loved the one shot. you are a good writer. thanks for sharing.

This is a wonderful piece of work! It's dramatic, and I like the way you wrote about Akira. It's also got a sweet and happy ending, but not a fluffy one. (Phew) Please write more things of this sort!

aw...sweet...the boys are so cute...

This was so cute! I liked it, even if I'm not really usually for the darker fics, but this was only a hint at darker things. Every coin has a flip side, I guess you could say. Wow. That was deep. lol, j/k. I thought this was really great, and I hope you continue to write great fanfiction like this piece. Ja ne! Great Job!

Cute...and sweet...and puppy dog tails. Hikaru just made me squeal. How perfectly well done.

i feel really good reading your fanfiction
it is so gentle, and the relationship is so real and humane.
will u perhaps write a sequel for it concerning how hikaru fianlly tell the secret? i believe it will be really good if it is from you!

That was adorable. I really really like!
You wrote this at work? lol.
I personally don't think there is much you need to work on. Frankly, I'm surprised it turned out so well. Most authors attempt a first-person POV and fail utterly, but yours was excellent. Thank you!