Wow keep going this is realy good

Hi, your story isn't too bad. I think the idea of Jack retiring and leaving the business in Maya's hands is a original story-line. You could have some interesting scenarios come up...Maya and Jack disagreeing about how she runs the magazine and such. However, you have quite a few grammatical and spelling errors. Also, people seem a bit out-of-character, especially Nina and Elliott. Another thing I can't figure out is why everyone is so upset about Jack retiring. He might be retiring as boss but he still owns the magazine. He's just letting Maya run day-to-day operations. It's not like he wouldn't be stopping by Blush...unless you have him moving out of NYC or something. So everyone's actions concerning Jack's 'retirement' and his showing up at the office seem over-exagerated. You have a good premise for a story here, but it needs a little work. Have you thought about getting a beta reader to proofread your work. They could help you with grammar and spelling and also give their opinions on how you could possibly improve the story.

Er...get some paragraphs and I'll reconsider reading...that is, please.

Wow! Another great chapter! Poor maya!...and Nina too...and probably Hannah, I guess? Anyway, if you turn off the "login people only" thing in your profile, you'd get many more reviews...just a suggestion. _ CIAO!

This was great! I really loved how you were able to keep everyone in character. I can't believe no one has reviewed this! Anyway, I hope to see an update! (Loves Finch to pieces)