im sorry im trying to keep all this in my head but ur story drags on alot, i know your attempting to rewrite the series in a way that puts snape in a good light early on, but with all the grammer mistakes and misused words in this story it is hard to follow.

I don't mean to be rude or anything, but your sentences don't flow that well, I don't think I'm saying this right, but it sounds kinda weird. Second, who are Herms and Jets?

I'll have to read this later, looks good though

Snape is very out of character.

wow. don't u love having the power to manupilate time? lol. i do, and i have to day u did a suberp job on that. lol. never seen so much in one chapter. lol. but it was good. THEY ALL DIED! MEANY! lol. i only killed one... and he didn't even really die once. hmm... maybe i should kill you in my story... lol. no. cause then u can't have the kid! lol. n e way! good chap and it's over. so does this mean update on the beginning? lol.

Thank you for updating. I like the new chapter. It seems to be very interesting and well written. Please continue.

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good chappie. sucks bout microsoft. thats the only thing i write on to. update once it lets u type again.

Well, this story is ok so far but I think Snape is very out of character. Snape would never out of the blue call Harry by his first name, let alone be civil to him. I"ll keep reading, though.

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sorry i haven't reviewed in a while... busy with this and that, but I am still really enjoying the story! Keep the updates coming! _

i can edit it, if u want me to, unless you have someone else already. it was longer. but longs good, and so is short. good chappie!

GRAMMER! GRAMMER! GRAMMER!
As you can see, this is a big concern. Bad grammar does put people off.
their the person's possession
they're they are
arithmetic is maths - arithmacy is the subject.
What about Ron and Hermione's reactions to Snape?
It is a good story, and I look forward to reading more. There are fewer grammar mistakes in each chapter. Perhaps a beta reader?

The spelling and grammatical errors are so painful that I can’t read any further. These are basic things that every writer should fix before uploading. Get yourself a beta reader but don’t pawn off your laziness on them, expecting them to fix it. Work hard to pick up your errors on your own first. You might also want to work on making sentences less awkward. There are far too many sentences that just don’t flow well or are difficult to understand. Strengthening your characterizations are another thing that you should consider. Make sure the characters are true to themselves. Explain any changes, don’t surprise the reader with them. And for goodness sakes spell Voldemort correctly!

cool stry so far. u just might wanna do some better editing. i found lots and lots and lots of spelling errors, gramatical errors, and sentences that just didnt make any sense. i also caught that 1 time u switched from third to first person in the same paragraph, and it wasnt like u were trying to "get into the person's thoughts" or something like that. when there are that many mistakes, it turns the reader off somewhat, because they have to keep making corrections in their minds or have to stare at a sentence for a long time trying to make sense of it. it can be very frustrating, so edit edit edit!
-wazza!