beautifully sad - you have a way with words that leaves me speachless

I don't think you're showing off, but you DID write a hell of a story. Loved it all the way to the end!

Great writing, keep it up!

Hmm. What I think is, you're showing off. You're so darn good at writing every one of these characters that you decided to come up with an excuse to do it! :)
Seriously, though. This was really amazing. I could instantly tell whose POV you were writing in each section. The method you used to tell the story was really interesting and unusual, not to mention well done. And the story itself was cool, too. Cheers!

Wow.
I mean, wow.
Still sitting here shellshocked. Fantastic piece of writing.
Wow.

Hey! I reviewed this earlier, but lost all my reviews, so that's like ten or fifteen reviews that I have to rewrite. YES, I write a ton of reviews for people, and read a ton, so I have ten or fifteen written a day. *g*

What I *said* was that I completely felt that Talyn-John was out of his element, and that made him a total jerk. He didn't - couldn't - understand what was happening and didn't - couldn't - want to.

Aeryn tries SO hard to convince herself that there is only one John (similar to Cathy's You Can Never Go Back, I think, which is great!) and it's much harder with the second there, staring them all in the face.

'kay. Now I have to go see what fics I read yesterday.

My God. This is amazing.

Avant Garde, Visionary. Wonderful piece. I hope you finish it.

We must have more. I've always thought that Moya John would have gone to Scorpy had Talyn John left.