Dawn's jealousy sense was activated! I love every moment of it :D

Will May's return have something to do with Serena, since they both know Ash? If yes, then that is another rival for Dawn, since she had to return his handkerchief and all that. Would be hilarious as well to have Serena screams in the story when she found out that Ash was already taken! Do you follow XY series too by any chance?

This is a good chapter for battles, with a lot of funny bits, too, namely Misty during the Angie and Dawn's match, as well as Croagunk during Brock vs Cilan.

At the beginning, there was a name "Conrad" - was it Conway or it is a character that I don't know (?)

Would Piplup be pissed off again since he took another collateral damage? Hahaha!

Sorry, but I don't enjoy this chapter. And I also don't like the 3rd installment, not so much. I mean, the whole Ash and Dawn battling their love rivald for dominance and claiming their rights as each other's lover seems like a glorified cat fight for me, and I really don't like that at all.

Then there's the fact you make Ash seen somewhat like a harem protagonist. Making many girls like him (excluding some that already canonically have a crush on him) and compete against Dawn just seems way to much drama for me.

Finally, Drew. I don't know whether it's because you made May like Ash or you just dislike Drew or some other reason. Whatever the case is, you turned him into a jerk. Maybe it wasn't your intention, but in my opinion you make it look like you're bashing some characters and pairings, as well as making a shipping war fic with your battle for dominance thing. Even though I'm a hardcore pearlshipper and an big Ash fan (my profile name and pic says it all), bashing and ship wars aren't my cup of tea.

Again, maybe it wasn't your intention at all, but this is how I see it. And while I don't like the 3rd installment (and to a lesser degree, the 2nd), I do like the 1st, probably because it's more fluff then some jealousy drama.

Here are three more girls and another Pokemon to contend with. Salon Maiden Anabel of the Battle Frontier. She runs the Battle Tower outside of Cremini City near Tojho Falls. Anabel is 17 years old. The other girl with potential feelings for Ash is Bianca from the 5th Pokemon Movie Latios and Latias: Heroes. The reason is because of how Ash kept Latias out of the hands of Annie and Oakley from Team Rocket. Latias will also have feelings for Ash as well as she can look like Bianca when she wants to blend in with others. Look at the movie and you will see that. Lady Ilene of Camaran Palace in Rota will also have feelings for Ash for his part in saving Mew. Look up the movie Lucario and the Mystery of Mew for that one. Rota is in Kanto.

I understand that this is mainly pearl shipping I really do but can u have ash and may take a walk together alone without may around this way she can talk to ash about what really was on her mind and ash can help give her comfort and give may some advice and have may at least kiss ash on the cheek once because even though she wouldn't be able to be his girlfriend but she can at least give him one to satisfy her feelings a bit and put her heart at ease to help her broken heart heal can u at least let may do that after what happened to her she deserves to at least be allowed to do that and to be honest with you after reading the main story and this one I'm definitely interested in seeing a advance shipping version of this story it's really a amazing stories u made

U know, I'm surprised there was no change with Dawn after that 'night'. U would think she would be more open and natural with her affections with Ash. Same with Ash, U would think he would try a few couple things with her after that.

Anyway's to help you have a better idea in there relationship I found a few stories that might help with this. 'World Class Skill', ' On Brave Mountains We Conquer' and 'It's just what best friends do, isn't it?'

I tried to warn you. Look St is just a troll giving out bad advice to new authors.

(I don’t watch the anime, so I’m not going to be able to review this story on content. Please tag your story as anime fic so people searching for anime fic can find it. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.)

Yeah, no one cares to use the world tags due to everyone knowing certain characters are anime only. That and people always mix aspects from all parts of the franchise.

[better if you separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story. You can do this through the in-site editor.]

Your author notes are bold. Such a thing is not needed as they are completely different text from the story.

[You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello,” She said] or [“Hello” she said] or [“Hello!” She said]. ]

This is completely incorrect. Dialogue is a separate sentence and as such is written as ("Hello," She said).

[You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. ]

Pokemon names are not animals names as Pokemon have been confirmed by official material to not be animals. Their names are more in line with the names of people groups or your own name. Both of which are capitalislzed.

I don’t watch the anime, so I’m not going to be able to review this story on content. Please tag your story as anime fic so people searching for anime fic can find it. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.

It’s better if you separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story. You can do this through the in-site editor.

You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello,” She said] or [“Hello” she said] or [“Hello!” She said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part IS considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. (“Speak” is also not a speech verb.) Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.

Hey, welcome. So look a warning given you are writing a Pokemon story. Farla, St Elmo's Fire, Talarc, Spencer841, AshxSelene Writer, fanficmanager816, seeldewgong, and a few others are known bullies on this site who review only to destroy stories and promote drama.

They will push their believes down your throat, demand you redo your story to fit their wants and no, they are the super minority and hated by the fandom. They also tend to post pms publicly so responding to them is ill advised.

They start off with a disclaimer about honestly thinking it would help. It doesn't they want you to be screwed over as they complain about trival nonsense that got their panties in a twist.

They think Pokemon is slavery. That you should capitalize the way they want, fyi Pokemon names are not species names (but actual names according to game freak) and that's been officially recongized in modern English. So yes it's correct to capitalize Pikachu for instance. Oh, and they give out false dialogue formatting (It's "Hello," She said dialogue is a seperate sentence). Spend time putting out a text block of non issues that are not going to help you. Don't get me started on Arceus.

What's worse is they all try to pass it off as them being critics in their reviews. Any review with it in the begining should be ignored if you get it.

Oh and if they say that they are being bullied. Know that they are lying as they been doing it too this fandom for years now and are just pissed that a group are working to stop it. The admins told them to knock it off.

If that's not enough on my profile is proof its utter nonsense. oh and if there is a guest reviewer titled "Take Down Hybrid" know that is's actually Handle Criticism Maturely the biggest of all of Farla's supporters and an utter troll who only doing this shit because Hybrid gave her criticism. The girls gone off the deep end and into complete insanity.

Best to remove it.

Speaking of them they had twice agreed to stop but don't. Even after being told to stop by the admins, their friends, and even random strangers. Right now they are somehow convinced that Hybrid, a woman, is a man.

If they claim they have proof don't. Its all utter nonsense land they been told by the admins to take it down.

As for the users you need to block and how, you block by heading to heading too the toolbar were you posted a story. Click on account and you should see the option to block users. Then add their id numbers.

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