This looks good! dude, nice story! It's a good start!

dude whats with all the shitty fucking reviews you been getting lately, you don't deserve it.

Also as someone who is actually trans I don't see how this is transphobic, so don't listen to the asshole below me.

first of all perverted and weird (And weirdly enough, transphobic) in other words, please rewrite it be less cringe.