Hmmm, I wonder when Mr. Wonka will eventually discover the truth. Then again, he did have a suspicion since he first assumed it was a female (which is obviously correct), so I'd be interested to know where this will go from here. Keep up the great work, and I'll eagerly wait for the next chapter!

Way to go, Charlie for messing things up with Veruca. *Extreme sarcasm* On a positive note, I really liked your choice of descriptive wording ("exuberant of views, egregious display, etc.) as well as all the mentions about how high-tech everything inside (and outside) the factory is. Keep up the fantastic work! I'm looking forward to more. :)

She took that better then I thought she would. Thsts character development right there.

I wonder what Charlie and Veruca will do next

And that's a lovely chapter
I think it's safe to say poor Charlie will wake up to Veruca screaming at him like a banshee.

I'm liking this story so far.

I wonder how Veruca will grow throughout the story. Hopefully maturely

Haha, it looks like Veruca surely hasn't learned her lesson, has she? I bet that she's going to have a really bad time pretty soon! I'm looking forward to how Charlie and/or other people are going to try to handle her.

UPDATE PLEASE

This is a very well-written story so far! I like it! As someone who ships Charlie and Veruca, I am excited to see where this will go from here. Keep up the great work! :D

If it's Veruca Salt, why do you have an OC character? Or will there be one later? Shouldn't Veruca be listed in the characters of your story?

Rude; drunk; demanding strong? Charlie, if that's your definition of 'strong', you are in for a world of hurt.

Ooh, I hope it's Veruca!

This was a great start! I'm looking forward to seeing who this old acquaintance will be.

This is an interesting look at Charlie's adult years. I think it's inevitable that he would have grown into a shy young man, although not as eccentric as Willy Wonka of course. It would be hard to find someone genuine who isn't interested in his money. I'm looking forward to finding out what he does about it.