Fridges and freezers? What about canned food?

Why wouldn't he just say that he kept it secret your entire life, or that it's awakening almost killed him and caused severe arrhythmia? Why not use something that's even remotely believable? It's been good so far, but that shit was JARRING.

It's a good story, but this is a bit exhausting to read(and probably write).

1- You often start a paragraph with one character "speaking" and end with different character's dialog, many times in the same sentence. That needs to be split into two separate paragraphs. Even if a reader can understand whom says what, it's better to split them up.

2- Too Much Gamer Stuff. Unless it is of importance, the reader probably doesn't care. Some of it is interesting, but many times it just gets repetitive and pointless. A dozen lines of Gamer details can be crunched into one or two normal lines that would read much better.

3- Information. Keep it simple and vague unless it is immediately relevant or will come up in the future. Introduction into information and/or layouts is fine for later displays.

I found myself skimming or skipping entire sections of bold.
As a general tip: if you can convert it into a simplified sentence or paragraph, do so. For Example: Readers don't need to know how much HP is shaved off each hit, and I highly doubt the mc does without looking, and in that case you want to include it in an actual sentence instead of looking at the status - this can be applied to basically every aspect of a Gamer System.

If you can't write it as a sentence in the mc's PoV, or it would actually look better as a System Notification, then do so, but avoiding all the 'heavy' System details works wonders for narration.
(personally - and not trying to be rude - I don't care to read the status of ten different swords that he will never use and we will never see - which you could easily condense into a short paragraph or even a single sentence)

I can't read this because their is just way too much wish fulfillment just in the first chapter. this is a really bad story. he gets ways to much power in the first chapter. maybe if he had got that power over the course of I don't know like 50 chapters and over the course of a hero's journey. this would be worth reading but it's not. the only time I can think it to be acceptable to give a character this much power at beginning of the story is when the character is funny as s.

Just curious if you have a update schedule or if it’s a “whenever I want” kinda thing?

Hmmm... i like what you did with Rei. A selfish bitch that acts irrationally for her own gain. You made it very clear that you want her to be hated and I like that. Hoping to see more of this wonderful fic...

Thanks for the chapter!

thanks for the chapter~
i feel like im being annoying but every chapter i seriospy just hate Rei more, so i hope they dont forgive her for this top tier bullshit.
thanks for the hard work and until next time~

Not really liking how quickly Umbrella got wide to them, nor how quickly they found them.

I’m hoping you treat the holy weapons as the equivalent of BFGs to the undead. Otherwise, there would be constant casualties to the group.

Saeko should be higher with her rep. You forgot her a few times last chapter. Also, she’s an “m” just as much as she’s an “s”; don’t forget that.

rip man, umbrella can be a serious pain.

nice chapter, though he seems a bit to harem protagonist like to me in that he ain't doing squat I won't pass judgement yet. only 6 chapters in after all. looking forward to future chapters.

Another awesome chapter once again my friend good job as always I'm really enjoying are gamer he's doing everything he can to help the others stay alive and not taking vantage of the others it shows he genuinely cares about them instead of the benefits he will get from the game for them I'm also enjoying the sweet and saucy moments between him and the girls I'm all for that now a new problem has come how will he deal with umbrella I can't wait to find out do keep up the good work and like always have a nice day.

awesome

nobody will miss rei miyamoto died... except her boyfriend and parents.

nice by the way

When there is umprella YOU KNOW there has to be wesker

nice chapter thx for writing it
fun to see the first hit squad coming after him will be interesting to see how he will deal with them