I couldn't get past the grammar the idea is cool but I would suggest a beta reader to fix those mistakes

Who wants daddy's belt!

I like this and will be watching for updates this was a really good idea and I’m glad someone is deciding to do it

Alright so i only got through two chapters. The concept is interesting, I really do like it. And some of the stuff you’re doing is also pretty cool. Examples: having naruto be known as a “solder”, him having scars from a few on his major fights, him studying and writing a book, him going to school. These are all neat.

The problem is your not expanding on anything at all. You’re not showing everyone’s reactions from seeing someone so young having a scar that gruesome. Or the fact that he’s as young as he is and had been “discharged by his military”. Those are just a few examples. You’re not even showing narutos reaction to things. His thoughts on the campers. Or why he’s going to school in the first place.

This story really has potential. The base of it is cool. But you need to expand on the interaction and put more effort into detail. Right now it’s bland and sorta boring. My advice is look for a beta or take the writing process a bit slower. As you get more experience it’ll get easier.

Also please think about the way someone with naruto’s background would speak. Y’all or y’alls wouldn’t be something he uses. (Not dissing on ya, I say y’all a fuck ton.) Actually think about how everyone would talk. Don’t explain what’s happening. Show it. It’ll hook readers more.

Good luck, hope this was constructive. Sorry for the long ass review.

I am looking foward to chapter 5 and Naruto should plan to revive his clan.

Dang it Eva still got canned.

You should reread your chapters and fix the grammar issues, most of the ones I noticed were you spelling names incorrect or without a capital first letter. I like your idea though, most stories are Naruto competing in the show but here we'll probably see more behind the scenes stuff since he's an intern.

Great

That is so evil of Naruto. He made the challenge even harder.

great new chapter, good luck in future updates.

Nice

can you make it a harem with izzy

Niceee

I really don’t think English is your first language, but if it is…

My only advice is to work on your grammar and to put in an effort to make worth reading. Here are some wise sayings that you should really read. All three of them are quotes of Robert McKee.

“When talented people write badly, it's generally for one of two reasons: Either they're blinded by an idea they feel compelled to prove or they're driven by an emotion they must express. When talented people write well, it is generally for this reason: They're moved by a desire to touch the audience.”

“Good story' means something worth telling that the world wants to hear. Finding this is your lonely task...But the love of a good story, of terrific characters and a world driven by your passion, courage, and creative gifts is still not enough. Your goal must be a good story well told.”

“When people want to sound smart, they add syllables to words, words to sentences, sentences to paragraphs, paragraphs to books. They try to make up in quantity and complexity what they lack in quality. That's bullshit! They're just hiding their bullshit!”

Seem good but kinda tired of the pairing it's kinda cliché now.