Harry Potter literally had his hope his will and his drive beaten out of him that's why he can't do magic

This is actually a pretty damn fantastic story so far. This Dumbledore is how he should have been in the books. To be an actual educator and push his students to do their absolute best. I really hope that you wont leave this story dead in the water for much longer, please come back to it soon!

Solid start.

you want a review? fine, this isn't a bad story. in fact it lays the foundation of being a rather solid one, but currently there isn't enough present for me to comment one beyond that. 2 short chapters are not enough to build a baseline for a fic.

so while i can see shadows of what this fic could become? there is nothing else beyond that i can comment on. you have a beginning, great. but fishing for reviews by withholding chapters? is not liable to get you many reviews.

you need to write and ost because its what YOU want. if writing fanfiction isn't something you want to do? then don't do it.

when authors beg for reviews at the end of a chapter, and imply it speeds up the writing process, it implies the author is writing the story out of a need for recognition. and that is a terrible reason for writing. writing needs to be something you enjoy doing. it cannot be about the recognition, or you end up with mediocre stories.

so please, stop begging for reviews, if you get some, then you get some. but when you ask people to review at the end of a chapter? it actually makes most people LESS inclined to do so.

so if you want to write? do so, if you want to post what you have written? do so. if you want reviews? then be patient, they will come in time.

also, DO NOT LET THE REVIEWS DICTATE THE STORY! write what YOU want, do NOT let a bunch of reviews dictate events. i HATE when wuthors do that. it always feels half-assed and a cop-out. it feels like the author doesn't want to put in the effort needed to write and create a story, and are instead relying on the readers to do ir for them.

if someone has an opinion? great, do not let that opinion dictate the direction of a story.

thank you for your time, and i apologize if i came off as a flamer.

i love writing, and it always annoys me when others try and turn this into a kind of commodity exchange. "Leave reviews or i wont update", and yes, some authors have gone that far.

A pretty decent start for the story. I'm looking forward to the world building you'll carry out and if the magical world is integrated with the Dxdverse. If so, what about the magical organizations of Dxd and famous magicians like Rosenkrautz and mentions of The gods, pantheons etc. in wizarding lore and history.

fucking shit

So once again a great read, the way you had the adults lamenting how lacklustre this generation was compared to last was interesting. The way they decided to go about inspiring them is completely fucked up though, I'm glad you had dumbledore call it a necessary evil. Cause using the memory of an orphans dead parents to encourage him to try harder is beyond fucked up. Realistic but fucked up. Honestly the only issue I have with chapter might be fixed next chapter so I'm hesitant to mention it, but here goes anyway. Dumbledore in this chapter doesn't seem to acknowledge at all that the way Harry is is like 90 percent his fault. I'm hoping there'll be some sort of scene next chapter where he sorta laments how his decisions caused this, or Snape brings up again how mediocre Harry is and he kinda snaps to lay the blame where it really belongs. Cause a little boy starved of affection and berated for not being normal then punished for being smart until 11,then told he's famous and getting all this attention for something he didn't do and reminds him of how terrible his life is. Of course he just wanted to be normal, to be average because deep down maybe then he'd be loved by his family /and/ people might stop reminding him of his dead parents.

Alright so firstly, this was really fun to read and its always cool to see more dxd crossovers. Your technical writing was good, I'm no editor but I read a shitload of fanfiction and I'm used to weird sounding sentences or misspellings and yours didn't have any of that. Your dialogue is good too, literally the only thing I thought was worth noting was the time Harrys sacred gear awoke was a little out of sync, it gave you a chance to point out the magic Lily used to protect Harry. But I think (and just my opinion, your way is still awesome) thematically having it awaken as the horcrux tries to merge with Harry would make more sense. The presence of a diametrically opposed soul trying to hijack merlin's host forcing him awake way earlier than he should be, and the exertion of forcing it and destroying it kick starts Harrys magical development. Then you can use the fact he's storng and using this sacred gear so crazy early as a background reason for any extra power you want to give him.

Anyway sorry for babbling, love your work, on to chapter 2!

Truly enjoying this story.

Sorry but Dumbledore's visit killed all interest in this fic for me. There was no logical reason for the change made by sealing Merlin to have caused Dumbledore to visit. It makes it seem as if you are randomly changing things as you wish with no previous events in the fic justifying the changes.

ugh, genderbent? Seriously, the dozens of hot DxD women out there available, and you decide to give harry 2 hp characters and 1 genderbent DxD character? Bad, bad, bad.

A few thousand years is a bit too much, considering St. Longinus was still alive 2 thousand years ago, and the spear, was just a regular spear before tasting Devine blood, so calling Sacred Gears "Longinus" before the guy with that name was even born is a bit off.

Very interesting story idea, and I for one can’t wait to see more!

Too much fanon and zero respect for canon magical power levels.. All human magic users are pathetic compared to any half decent devil or gear user.

“Some people are Born Great, others Become Great, and still others have Greatness Thrust upon them”

Dumbledore is all three but Mother Magic only chooses from the first category. Wether or not a Wizard fulfills that Potential is entirely personal choice.