Kinda wondering when TIM will rear his big head and try to tell Harry what to do. But this was good adapting to a Cerebrus less start. Still funny as hell.

I’ve got nothing constructive to say. Just encouraging. I enjoyed what was here, and hope you pick it up again. It has been a while.

Thank you for writing this chapter I hope you will keep writing this story and if you are I look forward to reading the next chapter. Keep up the great work.

This is fantastic. I just burned through your first story, and jumped to this one. I'm decidedly against people posting completely new stories just for the "Second Book", though. I really think you should just tack this to the end of your first one, and keep going on that. You'll probably get more readers that way.

I skipped the entirety of the "Harry's Past" segment, though. So far, that has not been a detriment to my understanding of the story. Flashbacks as long as that should not exist. They bore the reader, I've found. They either belong at the very beginning of the story, or split up into much smaller segments throughout.

The fact that nobody ever reacts to Harry's magic has me slightly confused. I'm aware that you addressed it as part of his mind voodoo on the whole friggan galaxy, but I feel like this would be more enjoyable if every other chapter there was just some flabbergasted, awed response instead of just annoyance, confusion, frustration, and discomfort. He's doing shit that should not be possible, and every character is just done with his shit? There's got to be someone that finds him fascinating. Someone that just asks questions, and puts up with his shenanigans in favor of experiencing it all. I'd think that would be Liara, personally. Maybe not anymore though. Kasumi might be fun for that, or Jack once she calms the fuck down... OK probably not Jack.

Joker though should be bouncing off of Harry's crap like the trampoline he could never own as a child. I'm surprised at you. You've basically thrown the most sarcastic character in the series through the window, in favor of Harry's whimsically explosive, hellrazing attitude. There's so much potential there, that I can't emphasize it enough. Please. More Joker Harry interaction.

Also, I want the return of the AI bunny that helped Shep on the Ship.

This is easily one of the best stories I've read. Please keep it up, and please write a novel, so I can buy it immediately. I don't care if it's about a talking cat in China that can only speak Spanish, where the book is written in English, but the dialogue is in the other two languages. I will read that shit.

Whatever happened to this greatness i miss this Harry he's awesome

Your ME time line stuff is interesting, but the past chapter feels kinda out of place. It fits neither tone nor plot, and unless you have some grand plan which won't become apparent until later on, I'd recommend leaving the past vague. Speaking from personal experience, the less avenues you have for bogging down a story the better.

OH SHIII-There's a sequel!1! When I found this I had to fight the urge to cackle maniacally, I failed

I audibly cackled at the "freest air in the galaxy" bit. Well done, mate.

great story so far, keep it up

waiting oh so eagerly

Really enjoyed your story and look forward to reading more

Glad to see an update, enjoyed previous story but tbh wasn’t a big fan of the last chapter. Seemed a different genre shift away from sci-fi/ fantasy

Hadn't realized this was out until the update on the old story! Great to see the story continues, looking forward to more - and to see if Harry claps some Quarian/Asari cheeks.

Looking forward to reading at least the next two or three chapters...

This Chapter ?